awsome lyric

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    Anya

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    I came up with this lyric, I can't seem to find more to add on it. I love it but I have complete writers block at this moment. I thought it was so good though that I'd figured i'd share it with you all so you can tell me what you think of it.

    the pages turn,
    words unexpressed for ages,
    the anger kept inside of me,
    is buried within these pages.


    Yeah it's short but I like how it's expressed alot lol. I'll eventually use it in a poem I make someday but at this point that's all I have. :lol:
     
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    That's pretty cool. I can see that being a nice poem :)
     
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    I think that sometimes, lyrics don't have to be sprawling pieces of work. I think that even though it was four lines you did get a lot across as you said. Great descriptive words, and it rhymes, so thats a bonus ;)

    Cool idea, Anya: 9/10
     
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    I think that sometimes, lyrics don't have to be sprawling pieces of work. I think that even though it was four lines you did get a lot across as you said. Great descriptive words, and it rhymes, so thats a bonus ;)

    Cool idea, Anya: 9/10 [/b][/quote]
    Thanks very much I like it too. I don't think I can write anything past it though, I have no Idea why but whatever else I write along with it it just ends up sounding like crap.

    I think it's just one of those things that are better off if you just leave like it is. :)
     
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    Yeah, thats what happens to me most times. Even when I can continue and make a full song out of it, the first section is still the best part of the song!
     
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    That is so cool! I love short poems, I think it's awesome the way it is. 9.5/10
    :D
     
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    Thanks. :D



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