Valenteano Valentine

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Adam, Feb 11, 2004.

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    Adam

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    Ya never with out a card
    You always wanna look cool
    You leave me cos’ I look a fool
    You’re my Valenteano female dog
    My black hearted valentine

    Is it a feeling
    Not to be feeling
    Loved by you
    I wanna know if its true
    As you untie your hair
    My black hearted valentine

    Ya never with out a card
    You always wanna look cool
    You leave me cos’ I look a fool
    You’re my Valenteano female dog
    My black hearted valentine

    One song one day
    Why can’t it go away
    But when its gone
    Just ####### drop it
    Just ####### stop it
    AND DON’T REGRET IT

    You get but don’t receive
    My black hearted valentine

    Ya never with out a card
    You always wanna look cool
    You leave me cos’ I look a fool
    You’re my Valenteano female dog
    My black hearted valentine

    Broken hearts and scarred emotion
    Lost love and no devotion
    BULLSHIT
    Red to black
    Tears of joy run down ya face
    Ya first place
    Don’t #### it up
    My Valenteano female dog
     
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    Mark

    Mark Canadian Beauty LPA Administrator

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    You need to lay off with the cursing, there's more meaningful words than "b*tch" and "f*cking".
     
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    Methybrea

    Methybrea Well-Known Member

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    :unsure: Having some problems?

    And I agree with Mark, lots of swearing isn't as sincere as more descriptive language.

    And that slangs kind of annoying too. There were a few good lines though, 'Black-hearted valentine' wasn't bad!
     
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    Tony

    Tony war in your bedroom.

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    not bad, but the thing I don't get is the lyrics "You get but don’t receive" aren't those two things the same
     
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    Cal

    Cal LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    i dont want to diss, you seem like such a great guy, but lyrics arnt your field man, your song has no story or theme to it, its just a bunch of lyrics put together, bad ones at that
     

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