I like this one... my morning glow shines against the water, gleaming my thoughts from within, this heart burns for you hotter and hotter, loving someone like you is a sin. desperate souls, yearning for me, to empty my mind, to define, what come's so clearly, I can't seem to hold, these thoughts any longer, it's killing me, strangling me, trying to murder me. I drown in my sorrows, trying to find, why my mind is so hollow, why love is so blind, every moment, i'm reminded with tears, that you'll never be here, you'll be hiding in my fears. every moment, left unread, the pages torn, my heart is bled. my morning glow shines against the water, reflecting my past, making it harder, my heart still hides what i'm thinking within, loving someone like you is a sin.
I can almost picture this line in my mind, great expressive words here. <!--QuoteBegin--Anya my morning glow shines against the water, reflecting my past, making it harder[/quote] I also like this similar line at the end, they're both really good. Overall, it's expressive, it flows nicely and it's fluently written.
I also like this similar line at the end, they're both really good. Overall, it's expressive, it flows nicely and it's fluently written. [/b][/quote] Thanks it took me one minute to do it and it was writtin just now. I can write things like that pretty quickly. I dunno why.