"Mislead" (Thanks to Saunderitos.) Silence the voice that cause my dread The ghost whose made the tears I shed Betrayed by her, the voice of my conscience Betrayed by my love, the fire of my heart Once I was the castle and she was the princess But slowly my love and her castle fell apart Inside me are the remains of my forever love, That has run from my heart - that which is over and done I remember every word she ever said Every word with which she mislead (Lies - Everything she said) Silence the voice that causes my dread The ghost whose made the tears I've shed Betrayed by her, the voice of my conscience Betrayed by my love, the fire of my heart Once I was the castle and she was the princess But slowly my love and her castle fell apart So long ago - her voice lives on As will it always, forever and beyond Quiet now, I've made peace These thoughts have fallen And will wake only in my dreams Silence the voice that causes my dread The ghost whose made the tears I've shed Betrayed by her, the voice of my conscience Betrayed by my love, the fire of my heart Once I was the castle and she was the princess But slowly my love and her castle fell apart Silence the voice that causes my dread The ghost whose made the tears I've shed Betrayed by her, the voice of my conscience Betrayed by my love, the fire of my heart Once I was the castle and she was the princess But slowly my love and her castle fell apart ______________ "Obsession" Your my everything - my goddess In my eyes you are faultless Your my temple - I worship In my mind you are perfect I know you abuse the powers - you hold the reigns You pull, you tug, you see my pain Your the image I've always loved, But your picture is burning up As the months went by, and the days turned to night Your kindness began to change, And all of my love for you pulled from your hate I know you abuse the powers - you hold the reigns You pull, you tug, you see my pain Your the image I've always loved, But your picture is burning up And now I see your cruelty And everything you ever thought of me Now you see, my love for you --- Was never fake, but has gone down with you Yet even though; my love for you builds again Because you are my everything, my obsession I know you abuse the powers - you hold the reigns You pull, you tug, you see my pain Your the image I've always loved, But your picture is burning up (Shall I drink my tears so you won't see losing you is my only fear?)
I like this part a lot, it's both vague and deep enough to show the intended emotion. <!--QuoteBegin--In.My.Skin. Quiet now, I've made peace These thoughts have fallen And will wake only in my dreams[/quote] I like the structure of this particular piece as well, and the words are well chosen. Awesome job
epic is the word i think ya might be lookin for.... that was awesome man i love the imagery and the structure of the first one nice job!
Please use proper english and not a mix of numbers and weird spellings in your posts. It's inconvienient for the people reading your posts.
Please use proper english and not a mix of numbers and weird spellings in your posts. It's inconvienient for the people reading your posts. [/b][/quote] Oh, and "dog" in slang is "dawg". But don't say that.
Oh, and "dog" in slang is "dawg". But don't say that. [/b][/quote] lol, Yeah I did have problems reading his post. But thank you anyways.(to the person with the weird spelling ) and also I thought about your name and I will name it "Mislead".