I decided to attempt a new style of writing with this next poem. I've been studying Whittman for the past few days in school, and his writing style is really unique. It's known as free-verse, in which there is no pattern or rhyme scheme. However, I decided to use a rhyme scheme, but use no pattern. I also didn't use any contractions. This is my first piece of work like this, and I would really appreciate comments! Morning Star Every time that I see your face I remember the fact that I have lost my chance with you Now, I am caught up in this place Wondering if I will ever make it true As I place myself in a dream with you My shyness and lack of courage seems to disappear All I want is to be with you Only in my dreams can I do it, and not here I cannot blame anyone for this It is something that dwells deep inside the chambers of my heart But the negative framework of my lacking bliss Takes me back to the start I will probably never understand why this is the way I am And I have done everything I can to change it This is not something I had planned And in the darkness of the shadows, your face is dimly lit Every time you glance at me My heart skips a beat and I try hard to catch my breath I wonder if you would ever take a chance with me Because I am feeling ways I have never felt Day after day is just more frustrating than the day before it I see your face almost everywhere I go In my dreams, I am always feeling euphoric Because, in my dreams, you are all that I know Sometimes, I act as though you do not even exist Other times, I look right at you and smile I do not really know how to explain why I feel like this If I had the chance, for you, I would walk a thousand miles If I could go back to the day that I became so introverted I would stop whatever happened from happening Maybe, then, I would be able to stop myself from being converted And, maybe, then, my shyness would not snap and sting I might as well transform I am not doing a bit of good in my current state Maybe, then, you could keep me warm Until then, I stand, here, at the gate
That was just amazing...! Seriously, the way the words flow together is awesome...personally, I prefer free-verse, so maybe I'm being partial. But the choice of words is excellent, and it really tells a story without giving too much away...I really like that. Plus, I can really identify with it since it is VERY similar to a situation in my life right now. Great job Will!