Why I Write

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    Tony

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    Tony, Dec 27, 2003



    Why I Write

    The past is always going to haunt my reality
    (That’s why I write)
    It gives me a purpose to make these people feel
    So maybe one day there cuts will heal
    The girls crying in a corner
    The boys alone, searching for a home
    (No one is safe in this world)
    It’s all just a bunch of bull ####
    What these kids go through
    Someone needs to help them through
    To be happy, be glad, there alive
    To go home and not worry about the troubles in life
    There parents don’t even care if they died tomorrow
    (Not even shedding a tear)
    Not caring how many other kids ended there life...

    There mother walking into the room
    Where her dead girl just pulled the trigger,
    But she just walks over her to get the t.v. remote…

    Why I write is nothing short of a phrase
    If you’re going through a phase where nothing even matters
    (This will make you feel)
    Children are why this world is great to see those few with a smile on there face
    Don’t let yours tie the not…1, 2, 3 that’s why I write
     
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    Alacrity

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    Alacrity, Dec 27, 2003



    Thats good ^_^
     
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    Tony

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    lol thank you, any more comments?
     
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    Awesome work!
     
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    Tony

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    Tony, Dec 28, 2003



    Thank You. lol
     
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    intheend1004, Dec 28, 2003



    good work, keep on writing
     
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    Tony

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    Thank You

    - Any More Comments?
     
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    Jamie

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    Jamie, Dec 28, 2003



    Thats cool
     
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    Not bad...
     
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    Methybrea, Jan 4, 2004



    Good concept but it could be written better....
     
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    Jae, Jan 4, 2004



    Great job. Almost made me cry....
     
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    Anya, Jan 5, 2004



    You have a very individual way of writing, I like your style. You even used a person in the story of your poem to express your feelings, which I definently like. I'd give this a poem/song a 10, awsome work!Urrg..actually I have a very strange question to ask you, I've been dying for people to read my work but no one seems to give it a chance sometimes or notice it. I have a poem I wrote waaay down there called 'move on happy' that no one took the chance to comment to or at least read. Would anyone here read it please? I really like it and I wanted people's thoughts on it but never got the chance, I feel so rude for asking this on someone elses post i'm sorry but i'm desperate for at least just one comment, whether it's good or bad I don't care. But awsome poem nonetheless and keep up the good work!
     

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