Six O'Clock

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    Will

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    "Six O'Clock"

    I’d always gotten lost in your eyes
    The emerald green took me in every time
    I had kept my emotions inside
    Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine

    Well, it’s been almost a year
    But the time has finally come
    It’s the end of the day now
    And I meet you at your locker
    As you put your jacket on
    I wrap my arm around your waist
    You turn and look at me
    The smile on your face lights the hall
    You slowly breathe my name
    And you slowly lean in to kiss
    I hold your hand and kiss you back
    I’ve dreamed of this moment
    Since the day that I saw you
    You whisper something in my ear
    But I’m caught in your eyes
    I feel you grasp onto my hand
    And we walk out the door

    I’d always gotten lost in your eyes
    The emerald green took me in every time
    I had kept my emotions inside
    Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine

    Remembering all the times
    That I just walked right past you
    I’m glad I’m by your side now
    I can put all that behind me
    You press your cheek against mine
    And I can feel your warmth
    I still get lost inside your eyes
    But now I can do it freely
    I grasp your arm and pull you in close
    I glance up to the sky and smile
    The beauty in your eyes captures me
    Your smile intoxicates me
    I lean in to kiss you again
    And you wrap your arms around too
    You told me that you dreamed
    And wished I’d talked to you sooner
    Told me you’d loved me since you saw me
    And you were glad I did too
    You were too shy to talk to me
    Just as I was too shy to talk to you
    As we walked down the street
    We shared our true feelings
    And as I walked you to your house
    You kissed me one last time

    I’d always gotten lost in your eyes
    The emerald green took me in every time
    I had kept my emotions inside
    Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine

    I’d always gotten lost in your eyes
    The emerald green took me in every time
    I had kept my emotions inside
    Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine

    (solo)

    I’d always gotten lost in your eyes
    The emerald green took me in every time
    I had kept my emotions inside
    Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine

    Suddenly, there’s a flash
    Light blinds my eyes
    My mother yells my name
    And tells me to wake up
    I glance at my alarm clock
    It’s six o’clock in the morning
    It was all just a dream
     
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    Two words Will...:



    Fucking awesome...
     
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    Holy #### thats good

    I like how you ended it

    Good Job
     
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    That was one of the sweetest things I have ever read. The ending surprised me. I wasn't expecting that. Excellent job, Will. :)
     
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    Thanks for the comments. :)
     
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    Wow. That was beautiful....nice job Will
     
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    Thank you. ^_^
     
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    Will!! You're copying me and putting in solos :p

    Actually, I love it! Really descriptive, and a cool twist at the end. BTW, 6:00 (an actual song by Dream Theater) is probably one of my fav. songs of all time, so good name choice! :D
     
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    :lol: Thanks for the comment. :)
     
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    Wow....I'm speechless, that was really beautiful! Damn...your a great poet...#### your a great writer period. Great job!
     
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    Dude...Will.. that was...erm.. I'm speechless man, that rocks.
     
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    Thanks guys. ^_^'
     
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    It's really well done Will. ^_^
     
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    OMG, Will, you're a talented writer... it is just freakin' awesome...
     
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    i was pretty good but i can't help but feel that the ending kinda spoilt it a bit.........i understand ur idea and all but it seemed kinda detached from the rest of the piece and kinda stopped the flow.
    but cool idea and the repeated verse was v effective
     
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    You'll have to explain more because you're the only person who has said that ruins the song, whereas everyone else has said it brings it together.

    You mean the chorus? Heh.

    Anyway, thanks for the comments.
     
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    Will, count me in on that solo :p

    Great Job!
     
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    Eh? :blink:

    Fankoo. ^_^
     
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    sowwy i was jus givin my opinion.... :wth:
     

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