"Six O'Clock" I’d always gotten lost in your eyes The emerald green took me in every time I had kept my emotions inside Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine Well, it’s been almost a year But the time has finally come It’s the end of the day now And I meet you at your locker As you put your jacket on I wrap my arm around your waist You turn and look at me The smile on your face lights the hall You slowly breathe my name And you slowly lean in to kiss I hold your hand and kiss you back I’ve dreamed of this moment Since the day that I saw you You whisper something in my ear But I’m caught in your eyes I feel you grasp onto my hand And we walk out the door I’d always gotten lost in your eyes The emerald green took me in every time I had kept my emotions inside Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine Remembering all the times That I just walked right past you I’m glad I’m by your side now I can put all that behind me You press your cheek against mine And I can feel your warmth I still get lost inside your eyes But now I can do it freely I grasp your arm and pull you in close I glance up to the sky and smile The beauty in your eyes captures me Your smile intoxicates me I lean in to kiss you again And you wrap your arms around too You told me that you dreamed And wished I’d talked to you sooner Told me you’d loved me since you saw me And you were glad I did too You were too shy to talk to me Just as I was too shy to talk to you As we walked down the street We shared our true feelings And as I walked you to your house You kissed me one last time I’d always gotten lost in your eyes The emerald green took me in every time I had kept my emotions inside Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine I’d always gotten lost in your eyes The emerald green took me in every time I had kept my emotions inside Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine (solo) I’d always gotten lost in your eyes The emerald green took me in every time I had kept my emotions inside Now that they’re out, you’re finally mine Suddenly, there’s a flash Light blinds my eyes My mother yells my name And tells me to wake up I glance at my alarm clock It’s six o’clock in the morning It was all just a dream
That was one of the sweetest things I have ever read. The ending surprised me. I wasn't expecting that. Excellent job, Will.
Will!! You're copying me and putting in solos Actually, I love it! Really descriptive, and a cool twist at the end. BTW, 6:00 (an actual song by Dream Theater) is probably one of my fav. songs of all time, so good name choice!
Wow....I'm speechless, that was really beautiful! Damn...your a great poet...#### your a great writer period. Great job!
i was pretty good but i can't help but feel that the ending kinda spoilt it a bit.........i understand ur idea and all but it seemed kinda detached from the rest of the piece and kinda stopped the flow. but cool idea and the repeated verse was v effective
You'll have to explain more because you're the only person who has said that ruins the song, whereas everyone else has said it brings it together. You mean the chorus? Heh. Anyway, thanks for the comments.