The Pain Remains

Okay, here's a poem I made. It's a little jumbly, but that's only cause I was angry and writing down random things that came to mind.
Tell me what you think please.....


The Pain Remains

You thought I was blind,
of these things,
sitting in my room,
crying,
wondering what,
my life would bring,
every moment you were in my life,
I wish would go away,
but all the pain remains,
and the anger will always stay,
I sit here in the darkness,
as the rain contrasts my sadness,
nothing will stop my thoughts,
and all of this madness.

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end

 

it's different to the others song, so....... serious??? I really don't know, I know only the 1 thing: good lyrics

 

Yeah, it's not exactly a song.
It's more of a poem,
yeah I know it's different but eh..it's okay.
It was just what I was
feeling at that point that's all.
Thanks for your comment,
your the only one who did so lol.
But thanks

 

I dont like many of the songs/poems I see here, but I really like this one.

 

Wow that's the nicest comment yet!

 

Very nice poem, i love it and great sig too

 

thankyou

 

Reminds me of Breaking The Habit, but never-the-less its still greet

 

gah! Everytime I write something...It sounds like an LP song...unintended..I guess it's cuz they're a huge influence on me but I don't wanna write like them

I gotta try harder now but thanks for the comment