I've always kinda wanted to write a song or poem called, "Come Undone" I finished writing this one last night and it works so ta-da! Please comment! Thanks Come Undone How can I find myself again, When my walls feel like they're closing in. It's hard to breath and no way out, My head is consumed by thoughts of doubt. I want to suffer and I like the pain, You'll realize my mood often resembles the rain. But I can't change the way I feel, I just want the insides to seem real. I'm unraveling and spinning around, How long before I hit the ground. I'm coming undone and feeling misplaced, I've shown myself I can be a disgrace. I'm feeling so faithless to me and this skin, I'm constantly screaming although I never win. I'm empty and faded beside the outer din. But I can't change the way I feel, I just want the insides to seem real. I'm unraveling and spinning around, It's obvious now I've hit the ground. I've come undone and lost my place, I've shown everyone that I'm a disgrace.
Hey hun, that's awesome. Sorry I didn't post on this sooner. You have awesome talent w/this stuff, keep it up!
Well, obviously morning_after is a LP fan, so yes, I think it is a good thing. Btw, great poem. You really put your feelings into this. Great job.
*laughs @ herself* I'm sorry Morning After, I didn't mean to come across as paranoid. I'm glad you commented on my song, thanks for doing so... I enjoyed it, really haha. Lorn: Thanks for the compliment, teehee. I hope I can get as good as you
Your giving too much credit to me. I'm not that good. Don't put yourself down. Your a great writer. This poem is better than a lot that I have written. So, don't think I'm better than you.
"How can I find myself again, When my walls feel like they're closing in." Inspired by LP, I like this . Good song, keep on writing!
My song is relatable? *whippa* Thank you corrupted_authority My song is getting all these great little compliments... thanks guys