Last Act

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Rohit LP, Feb 25, 2011.

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    Rohit LP

    Rohit LP The Silent Red

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    Apologise,
    Its the last you'll ever get to..
    Swallow your shame and say your sorry for every bruise..

    Forgive,
    For they were imperfect cause of their own wieght..
    Accept their rose,they dont deserve your hate..

    This madness has consumed humanity,
    Left us to punish innoce,
    Unless you sanctify your last act,
    And calm your arrogance.

    Forget,
    The mistakes never intended to haunt you..
    They made you you brave enough to face today..

    Cherish,
    The memories you miss and the people in them..
    Toast them,they're your company till death..

    This madness has consumed humnity,
    Left us to punish innocence,
    Unless you purify your mind,
    Right in their presecnce.

    Divide,
    The hate And envy from your spirit,
    For after midnight you'll breathe nomore,
    Sleep,
    now that your last act has sufficed,
    sleep,peacefully,in this infinite field of dreams....
     
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    SKaRR*oKi

    SKaRR*oKi Everything.Falls.Apart

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    i like it but it just feels very short, maybe add in a bridge? Really good what you;ve got there though :)
     
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    Rohit LP

    Rohit LP The Silent Red

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    thanks....actually..i've done bit editing to it...

    i've hav edited it....made it complete..
     
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    SKaRR*oKi

    SKaRR*oKi Everything.Falls.Apart

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    yeh i like that a lot :) well done mate you got some good writing skills
     
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    Rohit LP

    Rohit LP The Silent Red

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    :)
     

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