You ignored me for the last time You never heard me screaming We never even had the time To ask about meaning All you do is envy me, as I ignore I HATE YOU! Because I need to I HATE YOU! Because I need to As I search my soul All I find Are shattered thoughts And broken bones I HATE YOU! Because I need to I HATE YOU! Because I need to I disapear under dust To find a faded world A place were I'm free from lies I can escape the past I can escape the trurh And delete you from my mind But the soul remains As I search my soul All I find Are shattered thoughts And broken bones I HATE YOU! Because I need to I HATE YOU! Because I need to Then you hear me die Never one cry But its too late I'm gone In to a nightmare In to faded place YOU NEVER CARED ONLY I CRIED IT WAS ONLY ME THAT DIED x3 As I search my soul All I find Are shattered thoughts And broken bones I HATE YOU! I'LL KILL YOU! As I fall I'LL PULL YOU DOWN
No need to double post, there's an edit button. As for what you wrote, I think it's very good. Keep on writing and you'll get better. By the way, welcome to the LPA!
Hmm... why how old are you? I'll always be young *laughs at her own mirth* it's my last name, but nevermind that's not the point. I liked some parts of your song, I could relate to it. Keep writing and you can improve