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    From-The-Top-To-The-Bottom

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    Hi, I am going to post my original work here and I would like some people to give me some feedback.......These are all real feelings that I have/had in the last couple months. Please remeber when criticizing me that I'm still kinda young so.........

    I thought it was fate
    But now its too late
    What I thought was trust
    Must have been lust
    You know it caused pain
    And youre too vain
    You broke the thing that beats in my chest
    Its hard to believe our love was the best
    I used to think you were good enough to be my wife
    But now i realize i wasted a part of my life
    I guess its good, im immune to it all
    I know what its like to rise and suddenly fall

    It's too late
    It's all gone
    You're nothing but a twisted con
    The thought of you makes me sick
    And you used to be the one in a heartbeat I'd pick
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    Kinda short, but still really good! Keep it up!
     
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    From-The-Top-To-The-Bottom

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    Most of these are incomplete......

    You know its all I wanted, Just a simple request,
    But now it's time for me, To get this off of my chest,
    You betrayed me, And now its all done,
    Nothing left of a friendship, No more fun,
    But did you care? I didn't think so,
    You used to be my friend, You used to be my bro,
    And now its all gone, You never cared,
    So I it and reminise, About the times we shared,

    When It's all over, I'll still be here
    When It's all over, Have no fear
    When It's all over, This feeling will be done
    When It's all over, There's nowhere left to run!
     
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    Cal

    Cal LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    most of them are great but u gotta work on the cheesy rap lines that appear now and again :lol:
     
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    From-The-Top-To-The-Bottom

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    ???????????confused me there??????????
     
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    From-The-Top-To-The-Bottom

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    wow.......havent posted here in a while.......someone should give me feedback
     
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    Cal

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    i dont think your allowed to just *bump old topics*

    hey look! a really old post by me up there :chemist:
     
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    Anya

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    I like the lyric you did above *points* That's genius WOW lol. But you need a little work that's all, I like the context of the whole thing, I'd give you a 6/10 ^_^
     

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