your verdict?

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    aki*lp

    aki*lp LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    My laughter ,my shine
    The old life of mine,
    was there one night
    and left at dawn
    one minute there,
    next minute gone
    Where did it go?
    My hope my luck
    went that morning
    when disaster struck.
    Till now it is there
    my day is black.
    Light is distant,forlone.
    One minute there.
    Next--gone.
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Nice one. I like it! :D
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Interesting.
    I like it. :D Gets my thumbs up.
     
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    aki*lp

    aki*lp LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Thanks.
    Actually this is the editted version.

    The Original:::
    My laughter ,my shine
    The old life of mine,
    was there one night
    and left at dawn
    one minute there,
    next minute gone
    Where did it go?
    My hope my luck
    went that morning
    when disaster struck.
    My parents screamed,
    My siblings cried,
    And were snatched away by that monster.
    Till now they are there
    my day is black.
    Light is distant,forlone.
    One minute there.
    Next minute gone.
     
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    aki*lp

    aki*lp LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Wow this is amazing the editted version is better!!! (w00t) :p :lol:
     
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    aki*lp

    aki*lp LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Err...thanks for the compliment *lp.
     

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