Same as always, respond or dont..its up to you.. i just like posting... Hold onto me This road Is long and trying I never wanted to leave Truth isn’t welcoming I didn’t know it was going to be like this If everything’s the same Then I wish we could go back to nothing I am so tired So washed by your tears There is a something more in me And I want to disappear Fall down, though I’m trying Ill fall down, even though I’m trying My last light My own sanctity There is too much for me to replace I’m at the end of my sanity We have so many flaws, so much hate So many endless thoughts and time is a waste But I think we knew that we could never be safe There is a lot that neither of us will say I am so tired So washed by all of our fears There is a something more in me And I want to disappear Ill fall down, as if I’m not trying Ill fall down, and forget that your still lying I wanted for everything to be right You wanted a life that was nothing like mine Something else must’ve gotten in our way But we knew things would never be the same I tried, and so did you Still they managed to force their own agendas through I cant deny the fact that you helped them I know you will always be my one I am so tired So tired of lying There is so much more in me Slowly widening Ill fall down through myself I know I don’t exist Ill fall down through myself And it’ll be the end of it
This is probably one of my favorites out of the ones you've done. The only thing I would change is the "I am so tired" line. Instead of stating it directly, you could be more descriptive and use more emotive words. This is my favorite part:
He hehe...neato..umm, i dont know what i could say instead of im so tired maybe somthing like My eyes are burning So washed by all of our fears There is a something more in me And I want to disappear Ill fall down, as if I’m not trying Ill fall down, and forget that your still lying or I feel exhaustion seeping Our life washed by all of our fears There is somthing more in me And i want to disappear Ill fall down, as if im not trying Ill fall down, and forget that youre still lying ...hmm, turns out i cant think of anything..oh well