[Verse 1] Sometimes I wonder why everything in my heads feels so alright Don't know how it is, but after all the things I still ask this: What happened to us? Everything seems okay, but it's not enough. I need to let it go, but I still refuse; I want to know. I still refuse and I want to know... [Chorus] After all of this I realize, I still feel the same inside. I know that things have changed, and I still feel like nothing is okay. A false sense of security, but to you it seems, it's nothing like me. But in the end, I'm falling farther. In the end, it's far from over. [Verse 2] I still wonder why I am the way I was before, tonight. Don't know what it is, but after everything I still ask this: What happened to us? Nothing is okay, and it's not enough. I need to let this go, but I still refuse and I want to know. I still refuse and I want to know... [Chorus x1] [Bridge] What happened to me? Nothing is alright, not what it seems. I need to let it go, but I still refuse and I want to know... [Chorus x2] In the end, it's far from over...
funky... r u gonna take it further and sell it to bands.. i wanna sell my lyrics to my fav local playground...but i cant find em..
Nice work, really liked it, be great to hear it to music, my only concern is the verses could be a bit short, but it depends on the speed of the piece.
Sorry,not my type. I think the lines where too long, and the lack of ryhmes (typo?) made it hard to read.
Far from over... Damn typos. EDIT: Fixed it. They were short lines, but I just include two lines in one sentence. So, if you were to seperate them up, then it would probably make more sense to you. And you being a person who write lyrics and poems, should understand that not everything has to rhyme.
yes,however, you have to write it very well without ryhmes to make it good . You'll just have to understand that not everyone will like every piece of writing you do. And don't make excuses when that comes and just take it ^^
I know. Don't think I'm being a baby dude. I'm just making a point. And cut the sentences in half, they do rhyme. I just put them like that to be sorta, sentence like. Get what I mean?
i guess i understand what you mean,but i'm still having trouble seeing the ryhmes ^^ whats the ryhming scheme?