"redemtion"

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    tkd_rap

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    tkd_rap, Jan 23, 2004



    it's still in early form but for the most part pretty well set...just want to see your opinions, or questions...
    "Redemption" [title subject to change]

    [Intro quiet rap verse]
    Trapped inside this dark prison
    Hushed screams swell up from the deep
    Their violent tones growing as I listen
    Breaking the silence as I jump to my feet
    Drowning out my own plea for redemption
    A tangled web draws itself in the distance
    A river of lies flows deeper with every decision
    Slowly drowning me with no way of escape
    And then I scream
    And then I scream
    And then I scream
    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!
    [Guitar starts in heavy leading into the first real verse…]

    [V1] A deadly spider bite/ the poisonous thoughts infecting my systems/ breaking down reason/ and destroying equilibrium/ darkening my truth/ letting loose hate filled words before I can take them back/ the infection spreads/ as my heart turns black

    [C1] So could you ever? / Is there a way? / For you to forget what I have done/ and not me/ to love someone/ When the pain runs so deep/ and not flee to safety/ when he needs you the most

    [V2] Fighting off this infection/ trying to clear a clouded mind/ with my hate still close to me/ I push it aside to ask for an apology/ as a man standing in mist of his own actions/ searching for an answer to his prayer/ slowing fading as every moment of silence passes/ to a memory of a man that used to be

    [C2] So could you ever? / Is there a way? / For you to forget what I have done/ and not me/ to love someone/ When the pain runs so deep/ and not flee to safety/ when he needs you the most
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    well there it is, dont be to harsh lol
     
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    linkin park 101

    linkin park 101 Shhh! If You're Quiet I'll Show You A Dinosaur

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    linkin park 101, Jan 24, 2004



    youve got a future that was awseome get sum guys to rap it
     
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    tkd_rap

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    tkd_rap, Jan 25, 2004



    thank you, i do know an awsome white guy that rap really well, i cant sing but i can scream like chester..now to find some one that can sing well...
     
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    saunderitos

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    saunderitos, Mar 5, 2004



    its gd dog,but i fink u should change the and i scream NNNNNOOOOO,in to ,and i scream and like a mmmmmmwwwwwwwwuuuuuuu kinda faint live if u know wot im on about k :D :mike:
     
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    tkd_rap

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    tkd_rap, Mar 5, 2004



    i see what your saying, when i pratice it really just comes out like a scream, but i cant put down in letters what it sounds like, so i stick with "nO" right now, becuase AHHHHHHHHH! sounds stupid :lol:
     

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