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    cryptic

    cryptic Active Member

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    hey, my names matt, and i'm new to this, and i wanted to test our some of my poems..tell me honestly... :mellow:

    the sun shining in this world, but all i see; a grey sky
    by me you walk but you don't glance my way
    i feel my heart shatter like glass
    here i sit not so far away
    over i glance, troubled you look
    how you feel i dont know
    i hear your voice echo in my head
    i try to shut it out, before it shuts me down
    i scream in pain, forcing me down

    it's a start...tell me what you think
     
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    Mrs.Shinoda

    Mrs.Shinoda Active Member

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    i think it's very good. i can actually relate to every single line. keep it up!






    :mike: :chaz: :joe: :brad: :phoenix: :rob:

    "we're a bunch of thespians"-mike shinoda
     
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    Leslie

    Leslie huh? LPA Super Member

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    I really like it, keep up the great work. B)
     
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    cryptic

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    thanks! i appeciate everyone's comments! :chaz:
     

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