Love Fire.

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    Aaron

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    <div align=center>Love Fire.

    Once in your eyes,
    A love fire now ashes,
    Doused by me.
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    Came up with this one while studying for Math.

    I'm not sure about the syllables, I'm bad with them so I tried my best.^_^;

    Anyway, sense they are supposed to tell a story, this is about my old,(Hate the word ex.) girlfriend.

    Thoughts and reply's?
     
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    Jamie

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    Thats coool man
     
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    Glenn

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    The first and second line have the wrong amount of syllables, its suppose to be 3, 5, 3 i think...

    Anyway, great job! its pretty cool how a poem can be so descriptive with only 3 lines! that's why i like haiku. :)
     
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    Aaron

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    I'm pretty sure it's 5, 7, 5. Thanks for the comments.^_^
     
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    Excellent one! I heard about that but I can't remember the exact number...
     

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