Here's an older one that I stumbled across and liked. Distance Can Change Anyone Let Them Run, Run Away Into The Dark Savor A Year And Mark The Calender Feelings Collide, One At A Time. Understanding Is Brought By A Traveling Man Face Half Covered, Name Lost In The Sand. The Masks We Wear Which Cover Our Soul Say What You Mean, Give It Space To Breathe And Then Learn Self Control. I'm Fighting Within Myself Over The Ages, Surprises All Around. Shimmering Waters And Trees Made Of Gold The Masks We Wear Which Cover Our Soul. Half-Hearted, Not Quite, In Your Full Spirit Taking Time, Despite, You Can't Quite Hear It. The Sound, The Sound, Oh The Sound He Has Made Live In This Day With The Sounds Swept Away. (I'm Fighting Within Myself)
WOW! That was a great! Even the above quote was my favourite. Just so much mental imagery and it flowed alright except for this part: I think that part could've been less worded or after breathe take a new stanza. It seemed like it didn't belong in one line together. Good job Nick!
Well the bottom quote of yours, even if you read it how it is, by the flow you get in your head, it would be like if I added them under each other, It's just how I liked to end the first section, but thank you!