This is called darkness. THIS I HAVE BEEN WORKING ON for a while. This is not a quick little something like my last post lol. SO do take time to evaluate this. I wrote it to one of my friends sick beats, but I haven't spoken to him in a week. So I wont post the beat yet. Enjoi...and it's not yet done. In the darkness as I crops this The light shines with rays of chill I try to find something to chalk with ends of steel Still marking down the line I’m finding nowhere else to hide Life binding all that tries to stop its lies The grieving won’t stop to leave me behind So I see these things that teases our minds And we can’t get sleep to go free Be me in the bright shining light beaming rays Tripping over the heavy but steady parts of gray Flooding over the floor, I wonder Over the thunder skipping the trees But soon you’ll leave once we’re declared a team And Tie this kite to let it fly by I push on through the wind to find no end in time More space giving chase I’m caving in Letting in more letters to break the twiddling bickering within And I pull wings over my skin to go higher I’m no fighter but I’ll do it as a survivor Letting go more string you begin to ease off of me And the Streaming, the beaming of the non-forgiving dreaming I see Leaves me with nothing left to be What do I got to do to get rid of these issues Visual this framed pictured pixel on blueprinted tablets Giving you the sense of how I built lyrical building establishments I don’t miss them when they go missing “Cause the dissing was becoming to much fishing Trying to catch what can’t be caught The thoughts I have cannot ever be bought I could cough up a lung and not be done Come get a hook to pull me up one About a thumb rest from being able to shout Here me out loud without a crowded voice dropping the sound I’m proud to make you love letter what I say in doubt But too much weight is too much gravity pulling me down My world is shaped in all mistakes that already put me down Letting go more string you begin to ease off of me And the Streaming, the beaming of the non-forgiving dreaming I see Leaves me with nothing left to be Pushed by the pen my will could save you Look into my eyes I bet they’ll take you Into the Darkness they’ll watch and wait Will you stop taking for our sake P.Ss Esual & Shadow I am teh 1337
Definately better than your other one. Although I'm not so much a fan of the topicality, it was definately better written. And I'm not trying to be a jerk, as I'm sure I screwed up something in this post, but your grammar was a little off at times. P.S. You may be closer to 1337 with this post, but you're still not there.
I know. I just feal that this board is getting slower, and that SOME people may have a grudge against me from the Rap Battle threads.
Yeah, this board has gone REALLY slowly lately. And I doubt anyone is angry at you from the Rap Battle thread, they all seemed to be in quite good humour when I read it. Although you were torn to pieces lol.