These may be cliche but they're two short poems that I felt contrast each other pretty well, so here they are. Blue Solitude and I stared at the water She was silent and I didn't push her. We looked at the sky through a reflection in a pond I wished to die but stared silently on I threw a quarter into that blue and heard the splash and saw ripples too imagined the blade of one keen knife conundrum brought on by one melancholy life In that sky, a dull starlit display had taunted me as I sat waiting for day Tired, I jumped in, clothes and all into a mirror of deceptive jigsaw I fought back tears that fell in hollow streams And from my depression, by death I'm redeemed ------ Serene Rose petals fall down silently and then are lifted back up in a breeze to be carried away in the distance like a kiss upon the wind There's a whisper in my heart a chillingly murmur of conscience thats coveted with ebony bristles and brush shining brightly like the moon in the nights horizon These dark orange skies above me sway with compassion and pull me into their wideness like a kiss upon the wind
Did you mean to rhyme the first one? Because I didn't even notice the rhyme scheme until "knife" and "life," and then found myself cycling through the poem looking for all the rhymes. I'll have to continue this review later. The girl my poem is based on just came and went, and now I can't concentrate. Remind me that I have to give this another look.