No Candles Here

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    The Emptiness Machine

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    No Candles Here

    I shed my sword on eery ground
    when a majesty had lost her crown
    searching for a light that lonely night
    but no lantern glowed on those fields

    Beside a cross a prayer I breathe
    "God let them not shatter me
    for I know you've wrought my destiny"

    And the fields are sprayed
    painted red with lives unmade
    when will my fate be cast
    in this dirt which I've fell in last

    The sound of silver clashing
    when I've left a french baker at home
    and she is not alone
    scripted on my shield
    "Protégez moi"

    I had shed my sword on eery ground
    when a war had broke through town
    searching for a lam but finding only evening dew
    no candles flickered, no hopes renewed


    And the fields are sprayed
    painted red with lives unmade
    when will my fate be cast
    in this dirt which I've fell in last?
     
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    Gloomy Mushroom

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    It might be just me, but what does errery mean?
    I didn't like this poem because the French in this rather confused me to what the shield said in English. But I must give you kudos for this:
    Really nice and poetic way to write such a metaphor for blood.
     
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    I don't know french so I used an online translation service lol. What I was trying to say was "God, protect me"
     
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    Arlene

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    Even if you don't know French...I thought it was kinda obvious.

    Jesse, very well done. You have a gift. :)
     
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    I like this, even if I have no idea what "errery" means. :lol: Very cool.

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    @ Sarah —
    You didn't like the whole poem because one line that was in a foreign language confused you? That's the stupidest thing I've ever heard, I'm sorry. You could've just as easily looked up what it meant instead of just saying you didn't like the entire poem. Very rude.
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

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    Oh. It was a typo it's suppose to be eery which means strange, mysterious, frightening, gloomy... etc.

    Thanks Arlene I actually took my time on that one :lol:

    also I thought you would have realized it was a typo. maybe you did and just didn't point it out to me.
     
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    Will

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    Nope. I didn't know it was a typo. I just thought you were using a word I'd never heard before. Lots of people do that. It's common.

    Either way I liked the poem a lot.
     
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    thanks man! :)
     
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    It's Protégez moi. :)

    It made me think of Jeanne d'Arc.
    Well done sweetie. <3
     
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    Gloomy Mushroom

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    Ahh so it reads eerie :) I getcha now.
     
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    Thank you hun! I'll update it now ^_^
     

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