We Are Seven

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    El Muerto

    El Muerto LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    I tried a little bit of rapped verses, tell me what you think.


    we are seven

    another battle in the middle of nowhere
    third year in here don't know the reason for warfare
    blindfolded just like the rest of the soldiers
    they put gun in my hands now i am playing their war games
    snowflakes in air, now the enemy's spotted
    gotta stay calm, and think about my daughter
    at the end of the winter long awaited homecoming
    gotta open my four eyes now, the fight is rolling
    the sound of hand grenades, gotta cover my friends
    surrounded, they're running, they're not waiting for me
    afraid and all alone, now i realize
    if i wanna save their lives i'll have to sacrifice
    i load my gun, a blast, and all six fall down
    another blast and then the familiar sound
    the air support has come, the choppers take me away
    on the way to the hospital they heard me say

    early in the morning
    we are seven
    and when the night descends
    we are seven
    when i close my eyes
    we are seven
    we will never die

    it was the morning, she opened her eyes to the sound of the waves
    they're coming closer and closer it's time to leave this place
    she saw a glimpse of the danger approaching on her mother's face
    honey please speed up the pace, said father carrying suitcase
    her brothers were down in the car trying to start the engine
    her sisters were helping her mother trying to pack their future
    in a couple of little bags that is all that they had
    there was nobody to warn them about the weather ahead
    and a split second she's swiming the waves are crashing around her
    for a five year old little girl the ocean's too much too struggle with
    the rescue team found her a day after tsunami
    woke up in field all alone surrounded by the drowned bodies
    she saw her mother, her father, brothers and sisters around her
    she saw a couple of others, and at that moment they spotted her
    no shoes on her feet, her home a pile of concrete
    the doctor asked for her name, the only words that she uttered

    early in the morning
    we are seven
    and when the night descends
    we are seven
    when i close my eyes
    we are seven
     
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    Cale.

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    some lines rhyme. Some don't...


    I don't get how it's meant to flow?
     
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    Speed Freak

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    Your writting is meaningful

    Its called Modern day Contemperary poetry :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    it's very very good attempt at rap. very meaningful lyrics. love how you've glued in two separate tragic stories in one piece. better yet how one was a tragedy of loss of life and how the other was a loss of a future. also admire how the first story talk about a more mature man and the second story is about this little girl and yet, how they think alike in these consequences.
    awesome.
     
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    El Muerto

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    Thanks a lot :)
    I almost forgot about this one lol
    Thanks to Wild Angel too

    btw @cale
    I wrote the two parts to two separate beats, and I feel they flow pretty well. But maybe I'm wrong, I'm not too good at rapping anyway..
     

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