All Women Are Crazy, All Men Are Pigs

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    The Emptiness Machine

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    Ummm don’t take this poem to seriously ladies and gentlemen. Don’t come after me with torches either.

    All women are crazy. All men are pigs

    How can you do this?
    I'm sorry but I just don't understand
    Sometimes you act so much like a child
    But still you have the courage to call yourself a man

    What's wrong with you?
    You call upon emotions like kids go through shoes
    Then you blame it on your hormones
    As if they were a reasonably justifiable excuse

    Honey I've got to tell you.
    I'm just done dealing with you
    And your stacking lies
    Today I'm setting the line

    Baby I've got something to say
    It's not nice but that's okay
    Your emotions are out of hand
    I'm putting my foot down, watch me stand

    He watches her
    She watches him
    So hard to interpret one another
    Can't stop arguing about one thing or the other

    Why do all men act like pigs?
    As if they were raised in barns
    Why do all women go crazy?
    Exploding without any sign of alarm

    Maybe someday men will get things right
    Maybe someday women will cease to over analyze
    But for now life goes on just as it always has
    And will continue on for the good or bad ​
     
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    Shrazer235

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    THAT. MADE. SO. MUCH. SENSE. << >> *hides torch* ^^ You have potential though. Kinda reminds me of the way some LP and FM songs are written though. oO;
     
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    Jordan

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    I like it, not a topic i've seen covered often and I like that. I really like the line "You call upon emotions like kids go th(r)ough shoes" (dispite the spelling mistake lol) i really love that line and it manages to express things so well and also gives a laugh.

    Sorry shrazer but that was hardly LP FM like, this is a poem of 6 stanzas.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    I like it. It's definately different, as link_in_the_park said. I might as well just quote him ^_^
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

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    Thank you for all your kind comments. I thought that most people would feel negative towards this poem because it can seem a little rude. But I thank you all, so very deeply. Shrazer235, it's nothing like a FM or LP song. Please tell me how you came to that conclusion as I would know. Interesting.

    Link-in-the-park, I thought it was 7 stanza's maybe I'm wrong lol. I don't really pay attention to rules of poetry, I just write. But I counted 7 and 4 lines each.. Thanks for letting me know of my mistake in Through, as it has now been fixed.

    Mr. Nobody thank you for reading my poem, I really appreciate all our you guys-gals comments.
     
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