Writing: A bloodhound lost its way

I won't tell you how
a bloodhound lost its way
how it broke the leash
and ran away that day_

I won't blame you dead
I'll tell you how I lost
how it all began
and how I paid that cost_

I will make you stand
on top of these old graves
I'll let you find your place
amongst them in my grace_

I'll find you bare in there
they'll tear apart your skin
your screams shall not be heard
earth traps them within_

~

I was under the influence of "Hurt" by NIN when I wrote this so I imagined it in that melody were it a song.

 

That Is actually really cool.

 

Really good!

 

Thanks, guys.

I tend to really dig something when I write it and then begin to dislike it after a while. This is alright, I guess.

 

Lmao I love my stuff when I write it but am incapable of proofreading it cause I instantly hate it the moment I start

 

^You missed out a verb there. You instantly what?

 

lol See! even with my posts!

 

Actually really good.

Sorry I'm a bit late.