So I wrote this random poem yesterday and I would appreciate some feedback. I've been trying to continue writing it but it's not coming to me. "Stuck in his prison, he drempt of freedom Looking for the inspiration that could lead him, He stared at the sky with the hope of leaving What he finally saw was his grave, misleading They soared so far it would take his breath, But he didn't know, oh it would be his death Stirring his emotions he couldn't put into words, Oh, Icarus stared as he envied the birds"
I definitely love the imagery, but I'd tweak the flow just a bit. Also, "it'd would" is redundant, most likely just a typo but nonetheless. The concept is really great though, I agree I'd like to see what you might add onto it.
I agree, it does need to be longer but for some reason I'm at a stand still when I try to continue writing... I kinda have a second part but it's not finished yet. Haha thanks a ton And yes, "it'd would" was a typo. I just fixed it. Any suggestions for making the flow easier?