Forgive Me

[Anya]

It's nothing much I guess. I just felt like writing down random feelings.. I hope it goes well as a poem, so far I like it.

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-Forgive Me-

I've opened up my mind
to find my soul and define my reason
I hope you can forgive me-
for all i've done has only shattered in ruin..
everything I touch turns solid-
almost as solid as my heart beating outragously within me..
but deep down my sorrow overcomes these thoughts
drowning my feelings and what's left of me down farther
I wish I could take it back
everything i've said..
everything i've done..
but now I know what causes you this anger is me
so for that I have no right to live..

[Leslie]

Great job, Anya!

[Andrea]

Very good, Anya.

I think you have a spelling mistake.

for all i've done has only shaddered in ruin..

It should be shattered. Just thought I would point that out.

[Anya]

Originally posted by EastCoastPunk@Apr 6 2004, 05:41 PM
Very good, Anya.

I think you have a spelling mistake.

for all i've done has only shaddered in ruin..

It should be shattered. Just thought I would point that out.

Oh my god you're right. I can't believe it! I'm a neat freak when it come's to these things.

Well thankyou, Andrea.

[_PianoPaPercut_]

I like..! Short but it has meaning.. ^^

[Anya]

Thanks. Anymore comments?