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    It's nothing much I guess. I just felt like writing down random feelings.. I hope it goes well as a poem, so far I like it.

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    -Forgive Me-

    I've opened up my mind
    to find my soul and define my reason
    I hope you can forgive me-
    for all i've done has only shattered in ruin..
    everything I touch turns solid-
    almost as solid as my heart beating outragously within me..
    but deep down my sorrow overcomes these thoughts
    drowning my feelings and what's left of me down farther
    I wish I could take it back
    everything i've said..
    everything i've done..
    but now I know what causes you this anger is me
    so for that I have no right to live..
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    Great job, Anya&#33;

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    Very good, Anya.

    I think you have a spelling mistake.

    for all i&#39;ve done has only shaddered in ruin..
    It should be shattered. Just thought I would point that out.
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    Originally posted by EastCoastPunk@Apr 6 2004, 05:41 PM
    Very good, Anya.

    I think you have a spelling mistake.

    for all i&#39;ve done has only shaddered in ruin..
    It should be shattered. Just thought I would point that out.
    Oh my god you&#39;re right. I can&#39;t believe it&#33; I&#39;m a neat freak when it come&#39;s to these things.

    Well thankyou, Andrea.

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    I like..&#33; Short but it has meaning.. ^^

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    Thanks. Anymore comments?

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