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    Rain

    One of my more depressing songs. It's still in the writing phase, so some lyrics might change and some more might be added. Still not sure.
    Tell me what you think.



    Hear the sound/Thunder pounds.
    Run and hide as it burns the ground.
    Lightning strikes/With all its might.
    The Earth is laid to waste this black night.

    Pray for day/We're dead anyway.
    We're gone tomorrow.
    Wait for Death/He hears your breath.
    So give up your sorrow tonight.

    Regrets show/Secrets go.
    Take a look at what you have done.
    All that fear/Will dissapear
    Just as soon as we hit the sun.

    Close your eyes/Clear your mind.
    We're gone tomorrow.
    Don't you weep/Just go to sleep.
    And give up your sorrow tonight.
    Folks,
    We have a very special guest for you tonight.
    I'd like to introduce
    MR. HAHN

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    Wow. Sounds sick, but nice...

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    I like it too. The only thing what could it all better is when it's a bit longer...But sometimes short lyrics is better! So, GREAT JOB!
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    Quote Originally Posted by jasonmarks View Post
    Wow. Sounds sick, but nice...
    Thank you!

    I like it too. The only thing what could it all better is when it's a bit longer...But sometimes short lyrics is better! So, GREAT JOB!
    Thanks. It could get longer at a later point, but who knows?

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    This is great. Very poetic.

    Is this a poem or is it lyrics to a new song?

    I feel like we start getting into a really dangerous territory when we start trying to write around the idea of what some third-party thought of what our music should be when they can't even comprehend on how to tell us what that thing is, or guide us in a direction that can get us there musically or creatively, or anything. You know, having to have a specific type of song; forcing music to conform to that frame of mind is causing a lot of noise to be in and it's getting away from the song. (...) Let's stop trying to do things that other people want us to do, and let's get back to just being fluid, and writing songs, coming with ideas, and being like, "hey, let's check this out", and grading things, and being honest.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Night of Neptune View Post
    This is great. Very poetic.

    Is this a poem or is it lyrics to a new song?
    As of right now, it's just a poem. Later on though, I plan on adding music to go along with these words and turn it into a song.

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