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    Truth

    Just another rap. Criticism is as always highly encouraged and commendation is also bearable.

    What is truth?/It's the mirror of a dream
    What is truth?/It's whats lost in our genes
    What is truth?/It's the cousin of a lie
    What is truth?/It's convuluted despite a dozen tries
    It's a notion put forth by the broken
    To try and add some motion to a mental state that's frozen
    To blind the right hand to the left hand's doin'
    To blind the sightful man into mouse-wheel movement
    Deceive him into thinkin' that he's secure and he's safe
    Force him to believin' he was the reason for mistakes
    Make him think he was the one to make 'em all feel hurt
    'Till he accepts the fate that he knew he don't deserve
    'Cause even if he knows it isn't his own fault he sees
    The truth can't be resolved and even through his pleas
    They'll criticise every word he said/And he'll be left open
    Just 'cause he believed in truth for that moment

    Truth is the falacy mistaken for reality
    Truth is the tragedy that caused this calamity
    Truth is the landmark/For all false hope
    Truth is the headstart/To where we can't cope
    Truth is the dream we chase not to be achieved
    Truth is the fairytale we all want to believe
    Truth is the lessons learned through it's own absence
    Truth is the catalyst speedin' up all madness

    What is truth?/It's a long distant memory
    What is truth?/It's the lie that got the best of me
    Truth is that message/That changes over time
    Truth lacks consistency/Truth is a crime
    'Cause the truth was the thing that had held me back
    Truth was the source of my fear that faded to black
    Truth was the last hope that I thought I had
    Truth was the reason that everything got bad
    Now I find myself talkin' about a wayward concept
    Tryna find a way out/Tryna find my content
    Tryna retrace my steps/Tryna regain my depth
    Tryna fix this mess and just tryna catch my breath
    Fightin' for a method out/And I can't feel a second's doubt
    I'm just tryna reconcile/But I feel like a mess right now
    So if you see me/Know what I've gone through
    'Cause truth hid that you didn't want me as much as I wanted you

    Truth is the falacy mistaken for reality
    Truth is the tragedy that caused this calamity
    Truth is the landmark/For all false hope
    Truth is the headstart/To where we can't cope
    Truth is the dream we chase not to be achieved
    Truth is the fairytale we all want to believe
    Truth is the lessons learned through it's own absence
    Truth is the catalyst speedin' up all madness

    Nothing but the truth/Nothin' left to lose
    Nothin' left to bruise/And nothin' left for abuse
    You know it's nothin' new/The self-pity and self-blame
    But it's so shitty and it's drivin' me insane
    Always tryna keep my grip/Always tryin' to hold the ropes
    But it's loosened at my fingertips/I might just let go
    'Cause days pass on but the truth is still in sight
    We want it so much but to get rid of it we fight
    And that's why

    Truth is the falacy mistaken for reality
    Truth is the tragedy that caused this calamity
    Truth is the landmark/For all false hope
    Truth is the headstart/To where we can't cope
    Truth is the dream we chase not to be achieved
    Truth is the fairytale we all want to believe
    Truth is the lessons learned through it's own absence
    Truth is the catalyst speedin' up all madness x2
    But in the end we were meant to be apart, like separate chambers of the human heart...

    "The best lyrics are the ones that describe those emotions in ways you always wanted to say but could never find the words." - Mike Shinoda

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    KTTK is Chester suicide-diving off a cliff naked Jack_Farrell's Avatar
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    "They'll criticise every word he said/And he'll be left open
    Just 'cause he believed in truth for that moment"

    You lose the flow here.

    "Nothing but the truth/Nothin' left to lose
    Nothin' left to bruise/And nothin' left for abuse"

    Too many syllables to keep the flow here too.

    "Fightin' for a method out/And I can't feel a second's doubt
    I'm just tryna reconcile/But I feel like a mess right now"

    Same as above.

    "To blind the right hand to the left hand's doin'
    To blind the sightful man into mouse-wheel movement" - This stuff right here is gold, same as the last rap, use your best lines into the final version.

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    Thanks man, on both the last rap and this one, it's really appreciated.

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    Maybe change: 'Till he accepts the fate that he knew he don't deserve' to 'Till he accepts the fate that he knows he doesn't deserve' ? Or would that ruin your flow, i mean I don't really get the rhyme yet, so i'm probably no help!

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    It was originally 'doesn't' but that didn't flow very well no, but equally I think 'don't' is awkwardly like half a syllable too short as well I just dunno how to reword it.

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