Air Raid Attack [a short rap I wrote]

[Gloomy Mushroom]

I've been diggin' in the burrows
Out of a hole full of sorrows
No I won't let you hurt you see
I've been kissin' those tomorrows
Right down to the filled up hollows
Of everything you've taught me to be
I'm not going to hurt you
But I seem to have this virtue
And show you what you did to me
My breaking was long overdue
One always becomes before two
Choke on this hate you'll see
This blinded hate became intense
Like a jail barb wire fenced
Hanging like a noose from a tree
Death had become another suspense
So let this air raid attack commence

[Jack_Farrell]

I really like some lines but when you mix stuff with "Oh why God why you lied to me and left me!!!!" it becomes cheesy and just a poor attempt of mixing smart words with the usual relationship stuff.