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    i am corruption
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    I started this song out a few days ago and finished it today, it hasn't been revised, but might be in the future. (One more thing I would just like to wish a Happy Birthday to myself )
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    Fear mixed with pain/
    It seems like theres nothing for me to gain/
    The weird thoughts I'm thinking in my brain/
    Are they chaotic or insane?/
    Am I just another figure lost in this game?/

    (Pre-Chorus)
    Nothing for me to gain/
    Nothing for me to explain/
    I'm trying to find myself/
    Lost in my mind, wishing for wealth/

    (Chorus)
    So hear me out, and don't leave me/
    I'm telling you now (Don't Leave Me)/
    I'll scream it and shout (Don't Leave Me)/
    I'm calling you out (Don't Leave Me)/

    (Replying Verse)
    The pain inside is too strong/
    I don't know how long I can carry-on/
    But one thing I know is you are wrong/
    [And you will always be wrong...]

    Sometimes I hear voices/
    Sometimes I make bad choices/
    But one thing for sure is you are wrong/
    [And you will stay wrong]

    (Pre-Chorus)
    Nothing for me to gain/
    Nothing for me to explain/
    I'm trying to find myself/
    Lost in my mind, wishing for wealth/

    (Chorus)
    So hear me out, and don't leave me/
    I'm telling you now (Don't Leave Me)/
    I'll scream it and shout (Don't Leave Me)/
    I'm calling you out (Don't Leave Me)/

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    i like it
    Im on signature strike

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    Great flow, great rhymes and good meaning! Great stuff Neo! 4.5/5


    If today is all we see
    Then tomorrow seems to me
    Is just an illusion we believe

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    Great flow, great rhymes and good meaning! Great stuff DefManLP! 4.5/5

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    This is really some good stuff here. Good job!!!!

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    i am corruption
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    I'm glad you all like my lyrics, it helps me build myself and make better lyricz, but anyway sometime soon I'm gonna release my debut rock album and I was just gonna show a line-up of the tracks and post all the finished versions of the songs on the forums
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    here it is:

    01. Been Down
    02. Some Nobody
    03. U=Nothing
    04. Step Back
    05. Don't Leave Me
    06. Who Says
    07. Creep
    08. Pain
    09. Life Story
    10. [ Lost ]
    11. Who Says (Remix)

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    Whoa.. That kicks serious ass!

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    i am corruption
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    I know lol

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    put up some Mp.3s or something, I would really like to hear your stuff!

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    i am corruption
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    Unfortunately, all I have is beats right now that I made. I used to rap, I had over like 30 songs recorded, but I need a band to get to the recording stage of these lyrics.

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    Cool song and good luck with the recording deely
    silence your critics

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