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    Smile Just Go (My Bloody Pool) by TheLucky1

    My first big try at writing lyrics, don't hate please. I personally don't like it anymore but for the first few weeks of it being done I was quite proud so I thought I'd share.

    Just Go

    (Verse 1)
    No, i don't wanna hear your reasonings no more
    I just don't know what I am waiting for
    But I guess I respect the choice you made
    Just leave me here in this blood I bathe
    On the floor..
    On the floor
    On the... floor

    (I don't know what to think anymore)

    (Chorus)
    (Just go)

    I won't fight you
    But I just want you to know
    (Just go)

    I can't fight you
    And just so you know
    I never had a choice
    (Just go)

    Verse 2
    And, as I look at all the doubt I've made
    And even after all this times decayed
    You tell me that it's alright but there's
    No escape, this feeling just wont go a - way
    Go away
    Go away
    Go away

    (I don't remember what I was fighting for!)

    (Chorus)
    (Just go)

    I won't fight you
    But I just want you to know
    (Just go)

    I can't fight you
    And just so you know
    I never had a choice
    (Just go)

    ~(Solo)~ (may be, beginning to stray off the point)

    (Bridge)
    Pretending to be what I'm not
    Holding on to what I've...
    Got

    Everything's faded black and white
    But I'm trying my best not to...
    Fight

    All around me is turning cold
    And the only thing keeping me warm is this...
    Bloody pool

    -(Calms Down)-

    I don't know what to think any more
    (Bloody pool...)
    I don't remember what I was fighting for!
    (This bloody pool)
    It's all on the floor
    (Your bloody pool)
    It's all on the floor
    (Just go)

    Our pool...

    (Chorus)
    (Just go)

    I won't fight you
    But I just want you to know
    (Just go)

    I can't fight you
    And just so you know
    I never had-a-choice !!!
    Just go!

    Just go!
    Just go!
    Just go!

    Just shut up! and leave me alone...

    (I don't want to hear your voice anymore)
    (I don't know what I was waiting for)
    (This is why I respect the choice you made...)
    (To leave me here bleeding...)

    Just... Go

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    Another untitled little diddy I made, I still really like this one though (Read it as if you were frantic and restless, but also kinda quickly along with the pattern.)
    vvvvvvvvvvvvv

    Wait!, please, I super glued my heart to the bottom of your shoe
    You have no idea what each step puts me through
    So take a running start, make your move, take a leap
    But I can't promise I'll be alright if you land on your feet

    Watch my heart explode (<---I'm not sure about that line though)

    Please wait, This isn't right, I know I'm not dead
    It's just my throat is freaking packed full of lead
    Don't look now, I'm sick and spitting up bullets
    This might help a little, here's my head now pull it.

    Here's a chance of a life time, just do it


    Hope you liked it, thoughts??

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    Hmm, I don't mind thoughts, dudes. Bash it, like it, whatever. May be suggest some changes, I wouldn't mind any kind of input.

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    in 'just go' you did let ur feelings out...or did you write by your magination...coz the song reflects like it happend in ur life..
    nice 1 tough...songs a bit harsh tough..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rohit LP View Post
    in 'just go' you did let ur feelings out...or did you write by your magination...coz the song reflects like it happend in ur life..
    nice 1 tough...songs a bit harsh tough..
    Yeah, it is though, both are actually. They're about this girl, but the one I didn't mean to come off so harshly and at first it had no chorus, just some verses and a breakdown I had a softer sorrowful song in mind but it did a 360. But yeah it reflects how I felt about a very important person in my life right now at the time... or it was supposed to but it veered off in a different direction.

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    I should write another here. Something aimless.

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheLucky1 View Post
    Yeah, it is though, both are actually. They're about this girl, but the one I didn't mean to come off so harshly and at first it had no chorus, just some verses and a breakdown I had a softer sorrowful song in mind but it did a 360. But yeah it reflects how I felt about a very important person in my life right now at the time... or it was supposed to but it veered off in a different direction.

    happens..with me too..i can understad to some extent hw it feels..

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