[Note: If you can't find a beat to it, this song was made up using only turntables-mixers, electric guitars and an electric base, and drums. The Verses are rap. Everything else (the chorus, and bridge) is rock-ish.] Revelation. [Verse 1] Getting rid of the pain, without coming back to them. Slaying the vain, acting like the soldier I was back then. Never seeing the real face, I would see inside of me. Carrying around the weapon, just to watch them flee. [Chorus] Just to see this day, I would kiss my life away. And say hello to death. Live in this creation, and live in revelation. I feel so fresh. (Like I always did.) [Verse 2] Leaving my tag, on every victim I killed. Wasting all this bliss, from all the space I have filled. Never seeing the real face, I would see inside of me. Carrying around the weapon, just to watch them flee. [Chorus] Just to see this day, I would kiss my life away. And say hello to death. Live in this creation, and live in revelation. I feel so fresh. (Like I always did.) [Bridge] [Whispering voice] Just to see this day, I would kiss my life away, living in this creation, I hate this Revelation [Fading "I hate this Revelation"] [In a screaming voice.] I HATE THIS REVELATION! [Chorus x 2] Just to see this day, I would kiss my life away. And say hello to death. Live in this creation, and live in revelation. I feel so fresh. (Like I always did.) I HATE THIS REVELATION!
Okay, I finally read it and I didn't really like it. A lot of chorus and the verses are short. I also sense a bit of Linkin Park in the first verse. "Getting rid of the pain, without coming back to them." I've heard these 2 lines somewhere in Meteora, I know it. It sounds like "Figure.09" can anyone guarantee this? "acting like the soldier I was back then." Calling yourself a soldier is a lame move to me. "just to watch them flee." Let me finish it for you: "hip-hop heads, take a walk with me..." :whistle: Sorry, I'm really mean, huh? I'm just being critical. It's better than going: "That was great!" When truthfully I don't think it was. And even if people give you positive feedback, they should delve as to why. Details are important. I'm such a rambler tonight...