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    [Note: If you can't find a beat to it, this song was made up using only turntables-mixers, electric guitars and an electric base, and drums. The Verses are rap. Everything else (the chorus, and bridge) is rock-ish.]

    Revelation.

    [Verse 1]
    Getting rid of the pain,
    without coming back to them.
    Slaying the vain,
    acting like the soldier I was back then.
    Never seeing the real face,
    I would see inside of me.
    Carrying around the weapon,
    just to watch them flee.

    [Chorus]
    Just to see this day,
    I would kiss my life away.
    And say hello to death.
    Live in this creation,
    and live in revelation.
    I feel so fresh.
    (Like I always did.)

    [Verse 2]
    Leaving my tag,
    on every victim I killed.
    Wasting all this bliss,
    from all the space I have filled.
    Never seeing the real face,
    I would see inside of me.
    Carrying around the weapon,
    just to watch them flee.

    [Chorus]
    Just to see this day,
    I would kiss my life away.
    And say hello to death.
    Live in this creation,
    and live in revelation.
    I feel so fresh.
    (Like I always did.)

    [Bridge]
    [Whispering voice]
    Just to see this day,
    I would kiss my life away,
    living in this creation,
    I hate this Revelation
    [Fading "I hate this Revelation"]
    [In a screaming voice.]
    I HATE THIS REVELATION!

    [Chorus x 2]
    Just to see this day,
    I would kiss my life away.
    And say hello to death.
    Live in this creation,
    and live in revelation.
    I feel so fresh.
    (Like I always did.)

    I HATE THIS REVELATION!

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    I think this one is the best one out of the others u made.

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    Originally posted by N'tensified@Apr 21 2003, 04:29 PM
    [Note: If you can't find a beat to it, this song was made up using only turntables-mixers, electric guitars and an electric base, and drums. The Verses are rap. Everything else (the chorus, and bridge) is rock-ish.]
    Only? That's pretty much a full band set there. Also, it doesn't help me find a beat.

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    I like it!
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    Originally posted by From The Inside+Apr 21 2003, 08:28 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (From The Inside @ Apr 21 2003, 08:28 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--N&#39;tensified@Apr 21 2003, 04:29 PM
    [Note: If you can&#39;t find a beat to it, this song was made up using only turntables-mixers, electric guitars and an electric base, and drums. The Verses are rap. Everything else (the chorus, and bridge) is rock-ish.]
    Only? That&#39;s pretty much a full band set there. Also, it doesn&#39;t help me find a beat. [/b][/quote]

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    Okay, I finally read it and I didn&#39;t really like it. A lot of chorus and the verses are short. I also sense a bit of Linkin Park in the first verse.

    "Getting rid of the pain,
    without coming back to them."

    I&#39;ve heard these 2 lines somewhere in Meteora, I know it. It sounds like "Figure.09" can anyone guarantee this?

    "acting like the soldier I was back then."

    Calling yourself a soldier is a lame move to me.

    "just to watch them flee."

    Let me finish it for you: "hip-hop heads, take a walk with me..."
    :whistle:
    Sorry, I&#39;m really mean, huh? I&#39;m just being critical. It&#39;s better than going:
    "That was great&#33;" When truthfully I don&#39;t think it was. And even if people give you positive feedback, they should delve as to why. Details are important. I&#39;m such a rambler tonight...

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