I Suffer

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by erasethepain, Mar 10, 2003.

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    erasethepain

    erasethepain Well-Known Member

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    You rub the blade against your skin tryin to pass the time,
    It helps medicate you from the pain you have inside,
    Because if your not cutting, your lookin up ways to commite suicide,
    At the end of the day you come to the same conclusion,
    Pain is the only thing you have goin,
    The scars on your wrist,
    Doesn't mean #### to you, cause your convinced,
    That you dont need any help,
    Because in your eyes,
    As long as your breathing your doin fine

    You think of the pain you put yourself through
    All the damage that you've caused,
    Is the reason behind your every flaw
    Cause inside all you know is pain

    You shove the needle in your veins,
    Your chest tightens as you hold in these screams,
    Remembering back when you were young,
    You never thought you'd be doing this,
    Always thought you'd keep away from this ####
    But now your hooked, You never thought it would be this hard to quit,
    You thought you could easly drop this,
    But it's hard to when everyone around you does it,
    You look at all the things you've thrown away,
    and if you could go back, you'd make the same mistakes today

    You think of the pain you put yourself through
    All the damage that you've caused,
    Is the reason behind your every flaw
    Cause inside all you know is pain

    Cause inside all you feel is pain
     
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    Methybrea

    Methybrea Well-Known Member

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    Good flow and rhythm with the song and pretty good meaning too! Try for some more rhymes! :)
     
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    Hybrid Xero

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    Hey I like this One! I can actually create a rhythm. :D
     
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    Rhinoj87

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    your really good but you might want some lyrics that are more positive.
    this is only my opinion.
     
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    Shattered PrideSickofbeingdenied

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    yea nice, it really catches the darkness of a young persons life like me. Happiness isnt wat rules are world so why pretend it does?
     
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    erasethepain

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    Thanks guys. I edited it.
     

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