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    Save me please
    From this deteriorating being
    This hell I’ve brought unto myself
    This body I cannot escape
    Stuck in myself, myself I fucking hate

    Oh, sweet angel…
    With your wings of love
    That were once taken away
    And your body of warmth
    Save me and take me away

    Wash away,
    Everything.
    Everyone,
    Deserves to be
    Happy.

    Oh, fallen angel
    With your lust,
    And your rage
    Kill the almighty father
    And save us

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    I'm not sure how i feel about this. It is powerful and i fell that but for some reason it just doesn't have that 'WOW' factor for me. It is hard to explain but it is really good. Keep writting.

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    Thank you for the comments.

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    Extremely H! Vltg3
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    i really thought this was good but i agree with DAVID that it could be better. but the meaning behind it is powerful. a little work and this would be a work of art!

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    Thank you.

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    Danny's not here, Mrs. Torrance. minuteforce's Avatar
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    sounds a little goth in referring to a fallen angel, but it's pretty good nonetheless.


    What if I never even see you 'cause we're both on a stage?



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    Thank you much.

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