Oh Sweet Angel

[arT saveS]

Save me please
From this deteriorating being
This hell I’ve brought unto myself
This body I cannot escape
Stuck in myself, myself I fucking hate

Oh, sweet angel…
With your wings of love
That were once taken away
And your body of warmth
Save me and take me away

Wash away,
Everything.
Everyone,
Deserves to be
Happy.

Oh, fallen angel
With your lust,
And your rage
Kill the almighty father
And save us

[D_A_V_I_D]

I'm not sure how i feel about this. It is powerful and i fell that but for some reason it just doesn't have that 'WOW' factor for me. It is hard to explain but it is really good. Keep writting.

[arT saveS]

Thank you for the comments.

[fallenangel]

i really thought this was good but i agree with DAVID that it could be better. but the meaning behind it is powerful. a little work and this would be a work of art!

[arT saveS]

Thank you.

[minuteforce]

sounds a little goth in referring to a fallen angel, but it's pretty good nonetheless.

[arT saveS]

Thank you much.