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    "Justify"

    (verse 1)
    I used to be euphoric
    Now I can't find nothin' for it
    I can't see my dreams
    It's not how it should be
    Everything's fallin' apart
    I need to get a new start

    (chorus)
    The weak live only to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the darkness

    (verse 2)
    Time is countin' down
    I only hope I don't drown
    You've been pullin' me under
    You've found my one blunder
    Everything's fallin' apart
    I need to get a new start

    (chorus)
    The weak live only to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the

    (bridge)
    Clock counts down to the end of the day
    It's constantly tickin' our life away
    There's nothin' we can do to stop it
    If only I could stop and drop it
    I'd change my life today
    And I'd find another way
    To deal with the pain I have inside
    If only.. if only I could fly

    (outro)
    The weak live to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the

    Music plays only to justify the silence
    Just as
    Time clock ticks down to the end of the day

    The weak live only the justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to

    Just as the
    Sun shines only to

    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the darkness

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    thats really really good!!

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    Thanks.

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    It sounds pretty cool. But I think the chorus seems too short. Other than that it seems like the lyrics flow pretty smooth.

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    yea smooth flows i like it

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    you've got one thing that most songwriters don't have.........Flow..... Nice work..

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    most do have flow though like akuma, you just got to put your mind to it

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    Originally posted by 03Meteora03@Mar 2 2003, 07:00 AM
    most do have flow though like akuma, you just got to put your mind to it
    yea but the beat is usually hard to find....... but the beat in this song is very easy to recognize.......

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    Originally posted by Rybullet+Mar 1 2003, 11:03 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Rybullet @ Mar 1 2003, 11:03 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--03Meteora03@Mar 2 2003, 07:00 AM
    most do have flow though like akuma, you just got to put your mind to it
    yea but the beat is usually hard to find....... but the beat in this song is very easy to recognize....... [/b][/quote]
    for beats you got to have alot of imagination like lp they dont have the same style as other rock bands their unique thats why they are the best&#33;

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    well all I meant was the beat was very easy to recognize, I wasn&#39;t saying that it wasn&#39;t unique or anything.........

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    Originally posted by Rybullet@Mar 1 2003, 11:06 PM
    well all I meant was the beat was very easy to recognize, I wasn&#39;t saying that it wasn&#39;t unique or anything.........
    yea i see what your saying

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    Originally posted by 03Meteora03+Mar 2 2003, 07:08 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (03Meteora03 @ Mar 2 2003, 07:08 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--Rybullet@Mar 1 2003, 11:06 PM
    well all I meant was the beat was very easy to recognize, I wasn&#39;t saying that it wasn&#39;t unique or anything.........
    yea i see what your saying [/b][/quote]
    kool, finally someone understands me.......

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    Seems like it would be cool put to music, good job.

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    Damn you Will that&#39;s just classic.

    Like someone else said, you should work on the chorus a little bit-stretch it out a bit *shrugs* I wouldn&#39;t know...I&#39;m only creative when it comes to drawing...not lyrics.

    Keep it up mate

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    are you, Derek and your friend still going to form a band? If you still are, is that gonna be one of your songs? that would be heaps cool if you did.

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    it;s really good
    you really have something to say
    keep it up

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    hmm yeah i like it&#33;&#33;&#33; but one thing: i think u could add a few "minor" words to kinda make it flow better, so that one line isnt like really short, just add little words. u prolly dont get what i mean tho&#33;&#33; lol

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    yeah..It&#39;s pretty cool but maybe the chorus is to short..anyway it&#39;s a good one

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    I don&#39;t think you need to make the chorus longer. It all depends on how you sing it, I guess.

    The only part of the song I dislike is:

    Clock counts down to the end of the day
    It&#39;s constantly tickin&#39; our life away
    No offense, but thats a rip from In The End. I love the rest of the song, and I&#39;d love to see you put it into a song and play it. You might want to add a few more lines to the verses though. Just depends. The endings pretty long which is pretty damn cool.

    Good job, man. Write some more.

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    Originally posted by J Money@Mar 2 2003, 06:04 PM
    I don&#39;t think you need to make the chorus longer. It all depends on how you sing it, I guess.

    The only part of the song I dislike is:

    Clock counts down to the end of the day
    It&#39;s constantly tickin&#39; our life away
    No offense, but thats a rip from In The End. I love the rest of the song, and I&#39;d love to see you put it into a song and play it. You might want to add a few more lines to the verses though. Just depends. The endings pretty long which is pretty damn cool.

    Good job, man. Write some more.
    I took it from "In The End" on purpose. Most of the songs I write have a line from an LP song in them. They inspire me to write what I write.

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