Here is a poem which I wrote please read it and plz plz give ur feedback I would love to read ur comments whatever they are. I have become shallow from the inside Never thought of those who weren't on my side Never shared happiness even with those who were just beside Never even looked at them even when I had to decide Loved by very few and hated by most I set out to eat everyone thinking them my toast Didn't help anyone but never missed a chance to boast Saw thier lives burning and just let them roast Why have I become so cheap? Stabbing everyone for that one giant leap Breaking all the promises that I had to keep Forgetting that what you sow is what you reap God is the way I should lead ? Is it what I wanted and was there any need ? How could I have done this to fulfil my greed ? God please don't forgive me and don't even heed
Yaah its good stuff . The first stanza is my fav actually . For "think b4u think " . You sure seem to think a lot.
man, u rule!! I really liked this poem, i believe is the best I've ever heard! actually, i really feel it inside of me, because i believe i have a similar situation. I think we are very similar. I believe we kind of share that loneliness inside. sometimes (at least it happens to me), we are really selfish, mean, unfair or that kind of stuff with the others. I'm really sorry, cuz my hand could never express what's inside my heart, at least not completely. but i think u get me, right? hope to hear from u soon. c ya!
NICE I just LOVE the last line. it really makes u feel the pain and regret of what the person has done. i felt that the lind ending in toast was trying a bit too hard to rhyme but thats just me great poem