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    You know hearing your name
    Makes me go insane
    I have to be restrained
    From causing other people pain
    Never felt this way ever about a single dame
    And everyone even told me I was goin' the wrong way
    But being foolish me I still proceeded
    It was you I needed
    Just to have you to be with
    I thought we had a connection
    I really did
    I thought without you I couldn't even live
    But it turns out lifes better without you there
    Whing like a bitch about how life's unfair
    I know its unfair
    I am despair
    But no you never cared
    you just sat and combed your black heart hair
    You never even considered about me at all
    Even though I would of picked you up if you had falled
    But you just stood there and thought what a wreck,
    Am I really going out with that weak peice of shit?
    Well nice to know my girl truley hates me
    Well I've been feeling the same things as of lately

    I need to break away from you
    Release me from the things you do
    After all this I was just being used
    Well in the end whoever choses loses

    When I lye in bed at night thinkin' 'bout you
    And all the shit that you put me through
    All the slutty things that you do
    Just to fuck whatever dude who you think suits you
    You said I was yours and you lyed
    You said us forever but still you lyed
    It was then that I caught the glimpse in your eye
    A little devil inside
    Behind an angel it hides
    The devil was you when I saw
    You and my best freind behind the door
    You half naked and clothes on the floor
    It just blew my mind my brain could take no more
    It was at that point i just flipped
    My mental state was completely switched
    Into a psycopathic nervous twitch
    And While you and your boy were secretly scheming
    I was dreaming
    Of a way to redime me
    I needed my self respect back to me
    I needed to find my sense of inner peace
    I needed some anger to be realeased
    Thats why your boy's lucky to be able to walk on his feet
    Cos I broke those legs as a message DON'T FUCK WITH ME

    I need to break away from you
    Release me from the things you do
    After all this I was just being used
    Well in the end whoever choses loses

    And now
    I've found
    A Girl so beautiful
    Its just too unreal
    Her hair gold
    Her blue eyes bold
    Her smile the only thing I wanna see
    Her laughter the only thing I wanna hear
    Katie you broke my heart
    Sarah you stole my heart and I love you
    I really do

    But in the end
    whoever choses loses

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    I like it, but some parts of it seem a bit loose like switching between line structure a bit in the verses. Apart from that it was really good Keep it up!
    silence your critics

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    Thanks,I'll work on that

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    It sounds really good.

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    Thank you ,Any more comments?

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