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x7r3m3
05-13-2003, 09:37 PM
I'm working on this song on and off making it is good as I can, give me some feed back plz so I can change things and make it great...or somewhere in that area...

Inside

burned with flames the color of blood
so dark and bitter it attacks me inside
I run and hide, trying to find myself
the man I use to be, its so bad,
sad they cry for me, they pray for me
thinking I am the only one who is dark and tormented

I keep it in, but it still seeks through (2x)

EDIT: I finished it...

Inside

Dark and bitter it attacks me inside/
Insane and tormented I run and hide/
I wish I could find something knew/
But thereís nothing left, except the shame I feel/
Burned with flames the color of blood!

I lay, holding my head, going insane/
I wish I was something more then I am/
But all they tell me is Iím nothing like I was before/
They have no idea how this effects me/
Deep insideÖmy heart grows darker

Now I guess itís got to me/
Iím always wrong, its killing me/
Iím not begging, but I want something more/
My heart has finally tore into little pieces/
Falling into this black hole!

I lay, holding my head, going insane/
I wish I was something more then I am/
But all they tell me is Iím nothing like I was before/
They have no idea how this effects me/
Deep insideÖmy heart grows darker

I remember (remember) I remember/
So long ago it seems, but nothing has changed/
Iím still the same/
I take (take) I take/
I fake how I feel everyday/
Iím still the same/

I lay, holding my head, going insane/
I wish I was something more then I am/
But all they tell me is Iím nothing like I was before/
They have no idea how this effects me/
Deep insideÖmy heart grows darker

Deep inside, Deep inside, Deep inside. InsideÖ

x7r3m3
05-15-2003, 03:01 AM
^bump^ now that im done tell me what YOU think...