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Jawknee
05-13-2003, 01:48 AM
Here's the scenario:
You're falling for a girl (in my case it was my best friend) and school is almost over and you still haven't confessed how you feel. Now Summer will come and you won't see her as often, if not at all. All you're gonna do all Summer is think about her. Read this poem I wrote and give me some feedback, LPA family. ;)


The Crickets

Beautiful & young loving season of Spring,
Youíre at last leaving, but nothing did you bring?
Of course not, you brought me this crush, this odd thing.
No matter how I shake it off, it still clings.
The arriving of Summer may just even bring stronger feelings,
As I gradually become love-sick with no absolute healing.
What everyone else wants, is just what I donít;
The farewell of school just brings me down so low.
Iíll be shattered each lonely Summer night while the crickets chirp,
But that sound and the memories will help me rest like the birds.
Crickets bring me memories of Summersí featured inside my past;
Not able to see my friends almost each day will be a tough task.
Out of them all, Iíll miss you the most,
Because Iím more fond of you; more close.
My Summer nights will be spent gazing outside my open window,
As the stars shine bright with the moonlight, & I cool as the wind blows.
Not even a month of school remains,
And soon Iíll be suffering from pain.
I guess if thereís a beginning, there has to be an end,
But over the Summer days, letís still stay the close of friends.
Crickets chirp and in a distance, I can hear your voice;
Itís beautiful symphony and a wonderful noise.
Those eyes, how they just sparkle with delight, not even like the stars,
Because your set of sapphires just take my breath and steal my heart.
The cloudless sunny skies & my tear-covered face,
Means Summerís arriving & Spring without a trace.
Keeping my faith, Iím hoping we stay like this over the coming season,
Because to forget a face as precious as yours, dear, I see no reason.
The crickets will every night endure me into a sleep of heavenly dreams;
Where you would be lying in my arms in a bed of roses, Ďtill we fall asleep;
& Iíd pluck one from the grass, twirling it between your soft & smooth hair;
I reach to preciously kiss your forehead as your eyes dazzle & glare.
For every Summer sunset, Iíll anticipate & see my hands tremble and shake.
The crickets begin right after sunset causing the sky to change to many shades.
The first pair of stars I see, are just like the pair of gorgeous lips that you have,
Which are so lightly colored with an attractiveness that I canít seem to pass.
You are & will always be my one & only,
I only dream of you love, to ever hold me.
To show my love for you & how much I care, I know not how,
But Iíll regret it over the Summer when Iíll be so down.
Iím starving for your divine affection; your wonderful love I need to be fed,
And any day now, the crickets will start to put me into sweet dreams; into bed.

Jawknee
05-13-2003, 10:02 PM
Bumpity Bump.

Omar
05-15-2003, 04:10 AM
for more responses, i wud keep these all in one topic, but i like it, i dont want school to end either...several reasons...

Jawknee
05-15-2003, 04:46 AM
All in one topic? Ohh, you mean post all the poems in one, okay. Thanks, Omar!

Happy Gilmore
05-15-2003, 03:00 PM
Neo at least you'll see her next school year. In my case she knows cuz I was brave enough to tell her, but it wasn't easy at all...... And I won't see her anymore :( cuz it's my last year and I graduate and she'll go somewhere to study in Univ. and I'll go somewhere to study in Univ. [dif. country] and.......... :'(

[That's what my siggy is about.... this last month in school....]

Jawknee
05-15-2003, 10:35 PM
Yeah, this already happened to me a few years ago. I feel your pain though, man. Resort to music for aid.

Happy Gilmore
05-16-2003, 02:45 PM
Ye man but not actually not quite exact. Cuz music can be really depressing at the same time.... you need friends at times like this ;)

Jawknee
05-16-2003, 09:53 PM
Music helps the depression squeeze out of you like a sponge. Letting it all out is better than holding it in, at least in my view. I don't really have too many friends so music is my alternative.

Happy Gilmore
05-18-2003, 11:02 AM
But if you talk about the prob. with a friend you'll feel much better ;) [yes i agree music is the alternative]

Jawknee
05-19-2003, 07:48 AM
Yes, but there have been times were I fell for that friend that helped me out (if it's a girl that is). Then it just sparked a repetitive cycle of broken hearts and that's why I resort to music %99.9 of the time. ^_^

Happy Gilmore
05-19-2003, 08:00 AM
I still stick to the friends version :shifty:

Dedicated
05-19-2003, 04:20 PM
Back on topic......Cool poem :D

Happy Gilmore
05-19-2003, 09:04 PM
Originally posted by This is dedicated to the kids@May 19 2003, 04:20 PM
Back on topic......Cool poem :D
Okey cool back to my topic with Neo :whistle: this is a topic for broken hearts :wth: [Damn it sounds stupid. I actually never imagined that i'll say it....]

Jawknee
05-19-2003, 09:47 PM
I haven't had a broken heart in a long time but trust me, I can easily remember the pain. One of the worst things in the world is falling for someone at the end of the school year and never being able to tell them before school's out. Then you miss them like hell all summer long. :mellow:

Happy Gilmore
05-20-2003, 11:06 AM
True! Or even worse if you don't see them at all afterwards.....

Jawknee
05-20-2003, 06:33 PM
Definitely, man. I hear that.

Dedicated
05-21-2003, 04:22 PM
Originally posted by Happy Gilmore@May 20 2003, 11:06 AM
True! Or even worse if you don't see them at all afterwards.....
That happened to me when I left year 6 (2 years ago)


It's sad :(

Happy Gilmore
05-21-2003, 07:15 PM
Originally posted by This is dedicated to the kids+May 21 2003, 04:22 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (This is dedicated to the kids @ May 21 2003, 04:22 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--Happy Gilmore@May 20 2003, 11:06 AM
True&#33; Or even worse if you don&#39;t see them at all afterwards.....
That happened to me when I left year 6 (2 years ago)


It&#39;s sad :( [/b][/quote]
I&#39;m sorry man. Now I&#39;m also in this position.....

Dedicated
05-21-2003, 07:18 PM
Originally posted by Happy Gilmore+May 21 2003, 07:15 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Happy Gilmore @ May 21 2003, 07:15 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'>
Originally posted by -This is dedicated to the kids@May 21 2003, 04:22 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--Happy Gilmore@May 20 2003, 11:06 AM
True&#33; Or even worse if you don&#39;t see them at all afterwards.....
That happened to me when I left year 6 (2 years ago)


It&#39;s sad :(
I&#39;m sorry man. Now I&#39;m also in this position..... [/b][/quote]
Yeh.....It&#39;s really saddening :(

Happy Gilmore
05-21-2003, 07:50 PM
Depressing....

Dedicated
05-21-2003, 07:57 PM
Originally posted by Happy Gilmore@May 21 2003, 07:50 PM
Depressing....
Whatever........ :rolleyes: