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John.
05-08-2003, 08:20 PM
So far I've revised this song twice. It's kind of a depressant song.
(EXPLICIT LYRICS STARRED OUT)


(Verse I)

First things first/I'll go an extra verse/
just to prove to you I hafta f**kin' curse/
this world's f**ked up with masculine nurses/
when i'm done wit you, you'll be lying
in the back of a hearse/you won't be breathing,
but you will be bleeding/this is my moment,
i'm ready, n i'm leadin' Done Deal to the top,
tryin to be the number 1 name in hip-hop/

(Chorus)

I been down, to long to see the light/
I think about killing myself every day n night/
But it's so hard to find a place in life/
A place where you fit in right/

(Verse II)
To make things worse/
I'ma bout to disperse away from myself/
with rhymes that are so ill, you just might hafta kill yourself/
and if you don't believe in yourself, try believing in someone else/ (like me)
Cause I know you've been down on yourself/
You should relax and not be so hard on yourself/
So just listen to the words of this song/
Instead of flippin birds at the a$$holes you know who are wrong/

(Chorus)

I been down, to long to see the light/
I think about killing myself every day n night/
But it's so hard to find a place in life/
A place where you fit in right/

(Verse III)

Why must you mock me/
My b***h isn't the one who sucks c**k free/
Everything I do seems to be done illegally/
But I've been down, to far to see/
Every obstacle ahead seems to be facing me/
I can't go a day without cursing frequently/

(Chorus)

I been down, to long to see the light/
I think about killing myself every day n night/
But it's so hard to find a place in life/
A place where you fit in right/


(Verse IV)

I WANNA F**KIN KILL/
BECAUSE THE PAIN IM FEELING INSIDE IS SO ILL/
I WANNA F**KIN KILL/
RIGHT NOW IM UNABLE TO F**KING CHILL/
I WANNA F**KIN KILL/
I'LL FIGHT BACK WITH THE REST OF MY MIGHT AND WILL/
GO THE F**K AWAY/
DON'T STAY ANYMORE/
JUST GO THE F**K AWAY/
JUST GO THE F**K AWAY!!!!/

(Chorus)

I been down, to long to see the light/
I think about killing myself every day n night/
But it's so hard to find a place in life/
A place where you fit in right...

.ßroken Fist
05-08-2003, 08:24 PM
wow :o that is some cool #### man

John.
05-08-2003, 08:25 PM
you serious, thankz dude

Cal
05-08-2003, 08:38 PM
this song is so tight

John.
05-08-2003, 08:43 PM
thanks again, i never thought my first rock/rap song would be this good :lol:

arT saveS
05-08-2003, 10:45 PM
Not bad. :)

Part.Of.Me
05-09-2003, 12:50 AM
yo, dude.. thats sick!

John.
05-09-2003, 12:57 AM
:mike: ty ty :mike:

.ßroken Fist
05-09-2003, 05:22 PM
Originally posted by dEfManLP@May 8 2003, 08:25 PM
you serious, thankz dude
Yes i am serious

John.
05-09-2003, 06:55 PM
Originally posted by .ßroken Fist+May 9 2003, 05:22 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (.ßroken Fist @ May 9 2003, 05:22 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--dEfManLP@May 8 2003, 08:25 PM
you serious, thankz dude
Yes i am serious [/b][/quote]
lol :lol:

Cal
05-09-2003, 08:13 PM
its amazing man, keep tweaking it, it isnt 100%, mayby about 90 :D

Odaton
05-12-2003, 11:25 PM
I like it&#33; 4/5&#33;