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Shattered PrideSickofbeingdenied
03-26-2003, 12:31 AM
Watching

Watching From
A distance
Searching For the answers
To questions that havenít
Been asked

Sitting In The hell
Into which, into which,
I fell (continued)
Shrinking from
My Fears
Hiding, Iím Hiding (continued)
From My peers (continued)
Covering up my
Ears,
Trying, trying,
Not to hear
Their sneers (continued)

I can no longer stand on my own
Theses crutches are
A loan

My home, O my home,
Has burned to the ground

My life, My life (continued)
Is nowhere to be found (continued)


I am a puppy you
You are a hound

Always, always
Chasing me DOWN (continued)

~*End*~
J.K.

erasethepain
03-26-2003, 02:47 AM
Your name reminds me of a song I wrote.

It's good so far but make it longer.

Pinkin Lark
03-26-2003, 06:01 AM
its not bad

Hybrid Xero
03-27-2003, 12:14 AM
It's Good. You would want to try to make it longer, but it's good.

Shattered PrideSickofbeingdenied
03-27-2003, 12:17 AM
aight yea i'll try making it longer and re post it when im done thnx for the feed back