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Odaton
03-09-2003, 10:31 PM
My Last Breath

(Staring silently this is my last
Breath that I will take
As I look into the past,
How was the life that I made?
It all went so fast
As my visions fades
I knew that I had completed my task....)

CHORUS
I felt that I made a difference,
And that bolsters my confidence,
As I draw one last breath before my death...

(My children are grown up with great lives,
But I feel I have taught them all I could,
Giving them as much support as I should,
My son is an actor in Hollywood,
With a great wife and he strives
To be like his own father in time
And as I die, I keep that in mind.)

CHORUS
(Now as for my wife, she has passed me already
After she died, my life went downhill steady,
She was all I had, and I think I was ready,
To join her and leave the kids,
And if I did, I would have to rid
Of the guilt that was built upon myself,
Of the though of my children without someone else
To give them unconditional love,
But its time for me to move up above)

CHORUS

...I must leave you now...
I have memories
Of the life that I have spent
And what it has meant...

(And at least I don't join the crowd
Who say loud that they have wasted their lives
That they have tasted the bitterness of leaving their wives
Or the thought of losing their kids
Or regretting whatever they did.
I'm not because...)

CHORUS

This is my last breath
Before my death,
I hope this moment does pass quickly
I hope all my children won't miss me,
I have to go...
I have to go...

MaDd BoKo 03
03-09-2003, 11:50 PM
ehh..no offense and all..and i know your gonna get all offensive anyways..i just think it is stupid..it has to rythem..it dont flow...sorry man

Odaton
03-09-2003, 11:54 PM
lol :lol: :lol: actually i laughed when i saw your post!

No offense taken...
Try my other one "slipping away" and comment on that. I was trying something a bit different on this one! oh well it didn't work out! thanks for speaking your mind!

MaDd BoKo 03
03-10-2003, 12:39 AM
Thanks..no problem
...check out all my songs lol...nobody looks at them

erasethepain
03-10-2003, 12:42 AM
I like the song as in it seems like it has a lot of meaning. Some of the lyrics are kinda corny, but it's all good.


ehh..no offense and all..and i know your gonna get all offensive anyways..i just think it is stupid..it has to rythem..it dont flow...sorry man

Isn't that what they say about your songs? :-/

MaDd BoKo 03
03-10-2003, 02:17 AM
Isn't that what they say about your songs? :-/

Um noone looks at my songs

erasethepain
03-10-2003, 02:27 AM
I look at your songs I just dont reply to them. I know, I should cause I want others to do that for me.

Odaton
03-10-2003, 11:41 PM
Thanks guys!

I will be posting another song I think that it is better! Thank you for the comments. It is only my second song!