So-Called Sin

[Willstar]

Hey, I'm writing a hip-hop song inspired by Mike. I want your guys' opinion on what I can write about. I already have a chorus, and it's really phat, and the first verse is done, but I'm out of material already for my second verse, lol.

Please, help me out a bit, guys. :D

[Hybrid Soldier]

hmmm...loss? or maybe running away. i dont know... :chemist:

[Willstar]

Here it is: (And yes, I used parts of LP songs)

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So-Called Sin

(Verse 1)
Yo, you think you have what it takes to be an emcee?
Well, stop being paranoid, sleepin' in your dreams,
Emcees don't sleep, they rock the room all night,
We take normal words and we make them tight,
We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,
Emcees fight to see who can be the best,
But we are all 10 times better than the rest,
Do you really think you can handle all the work?
We'll smack the thing off your face we call a smirk,
We'll knock your ass to the back of the room,
And cause the entire club to fall with a boom,
You think you can sell records by swearing a storm,
While you sit there in awe watching the words we form,
We can bang our heads to this skin-tight sound,
While we blast around the room and knock you down,
We will pierce your skin like a giant splinter,
We'll bust our rhymes faster than you with a printer,
So remember these words, remember these rhymes,
And we'll show you something that truly shines,

(Chorus)
See the glowing from the underside of the moon,
See us glow ourselves while we rock the room,
See the underlying power from our lines within,
See how we destroy you and your so-called sin,

(Verse 2)
So you gather up your friends and prepare the attack,
Yet they laugh at you and stab you in the back,
As you watch them flee you lie awake in the sun,
You've been attack by our verbal hit-and-run,
Your rhymes are all manufactured and complete B.S.,
You think you have it but you can contest,
We'll still knock your ass out and throw you around,
You fly through the air like a Grade-A clown,
You can't cope with what we throw at your team,
We see that fakeness in your eyes, the silvery gleam,
I'll grip my mic and twist the cord around your neck,
Me and my team will stab you right in the back,
In a battle, we can hack it, while you retort with whack ####,
You'll get your ass kicked by our verbal backflip,
You can't pick up a pen and write a new identity,
We'll knock you in the face and throw you new reality,
You can't contest with the rhymes we write,
It's funny watching you fall as you enter the fight,
So remember these words, remember these lines,
And we'll show you something that truly shines,

(Chorus)
See the glowing from the underside of the moon,
See us glow ourselves while we rock the room,
See the underlying power from our lines within,
See how we destroy you and your so-called sin,

(Chorus)
See the glowing from the underside of the moon,
See us glow ourselves while we rock the room,
See the underlying power from our lines within,
See how we destroy you and your so-called sin,

(Bridge)
We laugh at you, your childish rhymes are no good,
Write only after years of experience, you should,
We make nothing up, we say what's real,
You just need to take it and feel the thrill,

(Chorus)
See the glowing from the underside of the moon,
See us glow ourselves while we rock the room,
See the underlying power from our lines within,
See how we destroy you and your so-called sin,

(Outro)
Watch us as we
Watch us as we
Watch us as we
Watch us as we destroy you and your so-called sin...

[Oblivion]

I cant get a beat.....

[Willstar]

Me either. :|

[Hybrid Soldier]

wat?....i c sure can. lol, just sing to the tune of "dedicated". it sorrta worked for me. great job akuma. me like it. :)

[Ent0303]

Very sweet. Maybe you could sing it to the tune of 'Three Blind Mice'. I'm dead serious.



Not really. I'm not sure what to sing it to.

[321xero]

"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:

[Willstar]

Originally posted by 321xero@Mar 11 2003, 03:23 AM
"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:
You just dissed Linkin Park. Good job, ace. :)

[Neil]

that's great will, if you could get a good vocal remover, do it to the dedicated beat

[321xero]

Originally posted by Akuma+Mar 11 2003, 08:19 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Akuma @ Mar 11 2003, 08:19 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--321xero@Mar 11 2003, 03:23 AM
"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:
You just dissed Linkin Park. Good job, ace. :) [/b][/quote]
actually kid, i think you dissed them when you STOLE their rhymes, something i'm sure not aloud on these boards and incorporated them into your own. all the stuff you actually wrote is way too cocky. <_< nice try though, keep it coming, if you must. oh, and here's a quote from one of your buddies, omihomi28, "but please make sure you only post what's yours..."

[Willstar]

Originally posted by 321xero+Mar 11 2003, 05:23 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (321xero @ Mar 11 2003, 05:23 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -Akuma@Mar 11 2003, 08:19 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--321xero@Mar 11 2003, 03:23 AM
"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:
You just dissed Linkin Park. Good job, ace. :)
actually kid, i think you dissed them when you STOLE their rhymes, something i'm sure not aloud on these boards and incorporated them into your own. all the stuff you actually wrote is way too cocky. <_< nice try though, keep it coming, if you must. [/b][/quote]
I gave them credit.

I think YOU'RE the one who's being cocky right now. Mike's rhymes are just like that, how emcees are fighting to be the best and whatnot, so basically you're saying he's too cocky as well.

[321xero]

Originally posted by Akuma+Mar 11 2003, 10:24 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Akuma @ Mar 11 2003, 10:24 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -321xero@Mar 11 2003, 05:23 PM
Originally posted by -Akuma@Mar 11 2003, 08:19 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--321xero@Mar 11 2003, 03:23 AM
"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:
You just dissed Linkin Park. Good job, ace. :)
actually kid, i think you dissed them when you STOLE their rhymes, something i'm sure not aloud on these boards and incorporated them into your own. all the stuff you actually wrote is way too cocky. <_< nice try though, keep it coming, if you must.
I gave them credit.

I think YOU'RE the one who's being cocky right now. Mike's rhymes are just like that, how emcees are fighting to be the best and whatnot, so basically you're saying he's too cocky as well. [/b][/quote]
"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"


oh yeah, that DEFINITELY sounds like mike to me, kid.

[[Darken Hybrid]]

i think is really kool. it sounds like 'it's going down'. good job, but come up with ur stuff...

[The Modfather]

Originally posted by 321xero+Mar 11 2003, 10:27 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (321xero @ Mar 11 2003, 10:27 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -Akuma@Mar 11 2003, 10:24 PM
Originally posted by -321xero@Mar 11 2003, 05:23 PM
Originally posted by -Akuma@Mar 11 2003, 08:19 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--321xero@Mar 11 2003, 03:23 AM
"you're not an emcee if someone else writes your rhymes" gee, how much of this really IS your stuff? trash it and start over, it's way too cocky, homie g funk era. :blink:
You just dissed Linkin Park. Good job, ace. :)
actually kid, i think you dissed them when you STOLE their rhymes, something i'm sure not aloud on these boards and incorporated them into your own. all the stuff you actually wrote is way too cocky. <_< nice try though, keep it coming, if you must.
I gave them credit.

I think YOU'RE the one who's being cocky right now. Mike's rhymes are just like that, how emcees are fighting to be the best and whatnot, so basically you're saying he's too cocky as well.
"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"


oh yeah, that DEFINITELY sounds like mike to me, kid. [/b][/quote]
Dude, SHUT UP.

Yes, this is someone in charge of these forums saying that.

Your just trying to start sh*t and I'm not going to tolerate it on these boards. Will posted many songs here that dont use ANY Linkin Park lyrics which are his own material on these boards.

Will wrote these in MIKE's frame of mind, hence the used lyrics.

I have yet to see you bust out any lyrics. So like I said

SHUT. UP.

You keep antagonizing people and you will be warned. You can be sure of that.

[321xero]

Dude, SHUT UP.

Yes, this is someone in charge of these forums saying that.

Your just trying to start sh*t and I'm not going to tolerate it on these boards. Will posted many songs here that dont use ANY Linkin Park lyrics which are his own material on these boards.

Will wrote these in MIKE's frame of mind, hence the used lyrics.

I have yet to see you bust out any lyrics. So like I said

SHUT. UP.

You keep antagonizing people and you will be warned. You can be sure of that.
be warned for what, spilling the truth? i see you have a problem checking posts because i DID post lyrics of my own, which are NOT hip-hop lyrics so don't read them that way. go ahead and tear it apart because you seem to be seeking vengence on me at the moment. IN MY OPINION, WHICH I HAVE A RIGHT TO EXPRESS, that was NOT in mike's "frame of mind." the lyrics were extremely childish and ruined mike's original lyrics. you seem so quick to defend your lpa buddy here because i guess you kids stick together but you really don't have to go ape about it. just because he's your "homeboy" doesn't mean he's going to be right every single time. i bet you didn't even read the lyrics, you just assumed since he's part of lpa, he's going to be right. seriously, can ANYONE give their own opinion about anything without being told to shut up? i guess your last post proves not.


"We take normal words and we make them tight"

tight? isn't that another word for "cool" that lots of younger kids like 4th graders use?

"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"

like a stitch in time? i'm sorry, but wth is that?

"Emcees fight to see who can be the best,
But we are all 10 times better than the rest,"

who the hell are "the rest?" non-emcees? well then of course you'll be 10x better than them because duh, they're not emcees.


"Do you really think you can handle all the work?
We'll smack the thing off your face we call a smirk,"

okay, mike doesn't make threats, dude, chill eazy-E. :P

"We'll knock your ass to the back of the room,
And cause the entire club to fall with a boom,"

more threatening, not exactly mike's "state of mind," is it linkied theory?

"You think you can sell records by swearing a storm,
While you sit there in awe watching the words we form,"


what words will you form, "tight?" :P

and my favorite line...

"We will pierce your skin like a giant splinter,
We'll bust our rhymes faster than you with a printer"

omg, why don't you just say you'll scan ryhmes faster than your scanner? hahahaha. :lol:

linkiedtheory, you provoked me to tear apart verse 1, so now please don't whine. :blink:

just relax. can't i just be critical instead of your average kid on this site saying..."i like it, it flows good," over and over again? you might think my lyrics are bad, but i'm not gonna go ape on you. geeze. :unsure:

oh and by the way, i'm aware that will posted other songs on here that didn't use lp lyrics, but we're not talking about those songs right now, are we? ;)

[Shinji]

you're good :blink:

[Willstar]

Originally posted by 321xero@Mar 11 2003, 09:12 PM
Dude, SHUT UP.

Yes, this is someone in charge of these forums saying that.

Your just trying to start sh*t and I'm not going to tolerate it on these boards. Will posted many songs here that dont use ANY Linkin Park lyrics which are his own material on these boards.

Will wrote these in MIKE's frame of mind, hence the used lyrics.

I have yet to see you bust out any lyrics. So like I said

SHUT. UP.

You keep antagonizing people and you will be warned. You can be sure of that.
be warned for what, spilling the truth? i see you have a problem checking posts because i DID post lyrics of my own, which are NOT hip-hop lyrics so don't read them that way. go ahead and tear it apart because you seem to be seeking vengence on me at the moment. IN MY OPINION, WHICH I HAVE A RIGHT TO EXPRESS, that was NOT in mike's "frame of mind." the lyrics were extremely childish and ruined mike's original lyrics. you seem so quick to defend your lpa buddy here because i guess you kids stick together but you really don't have to go ape about it. just because he's your "homeboy" doesn't mean he's going to be right every single time. i bet you didn't even read the lyrics, you just assumed since he's part of lpa, he's going to be right. seriously, can ANYONE give their own opinion about anything without being told to shut up? i guess your last post proves not.


"We take normal words and we make them tight"

tight? isn't that another word for "cool" that lots of younger kids like 4th graders use?

"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"

like a stitch in time? i'm sorry, but wth is that?

"Emcees fight to see who can be the best,
But we are all 10 times better than the rest,"

who the hell are "the rest?" non-emcees? well then of course you'll be 10x better than them because duh, they're not emcees.


"Do you really think you can handle all the work?
We'll smack the thing off your face we call a smirk,"

okay, mike doesn't make threats, dude, chill eazy-E. :P

"We'll knock your ass to the back of the room,
And cause the entire club to fall with a boom,"

more threatening, not exactly mike's "state of mind," is it linkied theory?

"You think you can sell records by swearing a storm,
While you sit there in awe watching the words we form,"


what words will you form, "tight?" :P

and my favorite line...

"We will pierce your skin like a giant splinter,
We'll bust our rhymes faster than you with a printer"

omg, why don't you just say you'll scan ryhmes faster than your scanner? hahahaha. :lol:

linkiedtheory, you provoked me to tear apart verse 1, so now please don't whine. :blink:

just relax. can't i just be critical instead of your average kid on this site saying..."i like it, it flows good," over and over again? you might think my lyrics are bad, but i'm not gonna go ape on you. geeze. :unsure:

oh and by the way, i'm aware that will posted other songs on here that didn't use lp lyrics, but we're not talking about those songs right now, are we? ;)
I have to admit, you made that very humorous. :lol:

But, it was written with Mike in mind, but I warped it a lot and didn't make it exactly like how Mike would rhyme. I didn't want to totally copy off of him.

[The Modfather]

Originally posted by 321xero@Mar 12 2003, 02:12 AM
Dude, SHUT UP.

Yes, this is someone in charge of these forums saying that.

Your just trying to start sh*t and I'm not going to tolerate it on these boards. Will posted many songs here that dont use ANY Linkin Park lyrics which are his own material on these boards.

Will wrote these in MIKE's frame of mind, hence the used lyrics.

I have yet to see you bust out any lyrics. So like I said

SHUT. UP.

You keep antagonizing people and you will be warned. You can be sure of that.
be warned for what, spilling the truth? i see you have a problem checking posts because i DID post lyrics of my own, which are NOT hip-hop lyrics so don't read them that way. go ahead and tear it apart because you seem to be seeking vengence on me at the moment. IN MY OPINION, WHICH I HAVE A RIGHT TO EXPRESS, that was NOT in mike's "frame of mind." the lyrics were extremely childish and ruined mike's original lyrics. you seem so quick to defend your lpa buddy here because i guess you kids stick together but you really don't have to go ape about it. just because he's your "homeboy" doesn't mean he's going to be right every single time. i bet you didn't even read the lyrics, you just assumed since he's part of lpa, he's going to be right. seriously, can ANYONE give their own opinion about anything without being told to shut up? i guess your last post proves not.


"We take normal words and we make them tight"

tight? isn't that another word for "cool" that lots of younger kids like 4th graders use?

"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"

like a stitch in time? i'm sorry, but wth is that?

"Emcees fight to see who can be the best,
But we are all 10 times better than the rest,"

who the hell are "the rest?" non-emcees? well then of course you'll be 10x better than them because duh, they're not emcees.


"Do you really think you can handle all the work?
We'll smack the thing off your face we call a smirk,"

okay, mike doesn't make threats, dude, chill eazy-E. :P

"We'll knock your ass to the back of the room,
And cause the entire club to fall with a boom,"

more threatening, not exactly mike's "state of mind," is it linkied theory?

"You think you can sell records by swearing a storm,
While you sit there in awe watching the words we form,"


what words will you form, "tight?" :P

and my favorite line...

"We will pierce your skin like a giant splinter,
We'll bust our rhymes faster than you with a printer"

omg, why don't you just say you'll scan ryhmes faster than your scanner? hahahaha. :lol:

linkiedtheory, you provoked me to tear apart verse 1, so now please don't whine. :blink:

just relax. can't i just be critical instead of your average kid on this site saying..."i like it, it flows good," over and over again? you might think my lyrics are bad, but i'm not gonna go ape on you. geeze. :unsure:

oh and by the way, i'm aware that will posted other songs on here that didn't use lp lyrics, but we're not talking about those songs right now, are we? ;)
"Just relax" You just basically tore apart and put down my friend's song, how the HELL should I relax? Basically "Disrespecting Staff"

You can be critical, yes. But what you have been is just plain freakin' rude, and you know it.

Like I said before, knock it off. I'm not kidding this time. I'm a nice moderator and a nice guy but a total prick when you get on my bad side. Which you are slowly starting to..

"linkiedtheory, you provoked me to tear apart verse 1, so now please don't whine. "

Your also kind of saying im whining and calling me out. Trust me, you do NOT want to call me out.

[Hybrid Soldier]

mamamea......the meteora fever has struck. mankind shall fallll......
:chemist:

[321xero]

"I have to admit, you made that very humorous.

But, it was written with Mike in mind, but I warped it a lot and didn't make it exactly like how Mike would rhyme. I didn't want to totally copy off of him. " -akuma

this totally contradicts what your buddy linkied theory is saying that you wrote it in mike's state of mind. he seems to know your lyrics more than YOU! hahaha. anywho, the last sentence in that quote is all i need to back off. :)

[Odaton]

LOL I am loving this!!!


:lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

[OmihomiNY]

no offense, but everyone who's fighting is looking like a fool :lol:

[Willstar]

Originally posted by OmihomiNY@Mar 12 2003, 09:47 PM
no offense, but everyone who's fighting is looking like a fool :lol:
That's why I stopped. There's no point.

[Bryan]

Originally posted by 321xero@Mar 11 2003, 10:12 PM
Dude, SHUT UP.

Yes, this is someone in charge of these forums saying that.

Your just trying to start sh*t and I'm not going to tolerate it on these boards. Will posted many songs here that dont use ANY Linkin Park lyrics which are his own material on these boards.

Will wrote these in MIKE's frame of mind, hence the used lyrics.

I have yet to see you bust out any lyrics. So like I said

SHUT. UP.

You keep antagonizing people and you will be warned. You can be sure of that.
be warned for what, spilling the truth? i see you have a problem checking posts because i DID post lyrics of my own, which are NOT hip-hop lyrics so don't read them that way. go ahead and tear it apart because you seem to be seeking vengence on me at the moment. IN MY OPINION, WHICH I HAVE A RIGHT TO EXPRESS, that was NOT in mike's "frame of mind." the lyrics were extremely childish and ruined mike's original lyrics. you seem so quick to defend your lpa buddy here because i guess you kids stick together but you really don't have to go ape about it. just because he's your "homeboy" doesn't mean he's going to be right every single time. i bet you didn't even read the lyrics, you just assumed since he's part of lpa, he's going to be right. seriously, can ANYONE give their own opinion about anything without being told to shut up? i guess your last post proves not.


"We take normal words and we make them tight"

tight? isn't that another word for "cool" that lots of younger kids like 4th graders use?

"We can kick your ass with the words we rhyme,
We'll knock your #### out like a stitch in time,"

like a stitch in time? i'm sorry, but wth is that?

"Emcees fight to see who can be the best,
But we are all 10 times better than the rest,"

who the hell are "the rest?" non-emcees? well then of course you'll be 10x better than them because duh, they're not emcees.


"Do you really think you can handle all the work?
We'll smack the thing off your face we call a smirk,"

okay, mike doesn't make threats, dude, chill eazy-E. :P

"We'll knock your ass to the back of the room,
And cause the entire club to fall with a boom,"

more threatening, not exactly mike's "state of mind," is it linkied theory?

"You think you can sell records by swearing a storm,
While you sit there in awe watching the words we form,"


what words will you form, "tight?" :P

and my favorite line...

"We will pierce your skin like a giant splinter,
We'll bust our rhymes faster than you with a printer"

omg, why don't you just say you'll scan ryhmes faster than your scanner? hahahaha. :lol:

linkiedtheory, you provoked me to tear apart verse 1, so now please don't whine. :blink:

just relax. can't i just be critical instead of your average kid on this site saying..."i like it, it flows good," over and over again? you might think my lyrics are bad, but i'm not gonna go ape on you. geeze. :unsure:

oh and by the way, i'm aware that will posted other songs on here that didn't use lp lyrics, but we're not talking about those songs right now, are we? ;)
Not trying to get involved, but I need to correct you.

Actually, Mike does threat in one of his songs:

I'll b*tch slap your soul ~ Reading My Eyes

See, so you were wrong. :)

[Neil]

Yo 321xero, just shut up man, your just instigating a fight. Will wrote this as a 'fan rap' of Mike. Grow up

[321xero]

i'm sorry but this is between myself and will, not you, kid, so stay OUT! chester76, i do realize there have been times he's kinda threatened...like "get your ass kicked" (step up) and i think a line or 2 in high voltage. sorry about that one. (yes, this is somewhat of an apology) but yeah, i'm pretty much through with this thread, unless children like lp_hybridtheory_xero wanna keep it coming, then i'm ready to retaliate. :lol: chester76 did his math! :D