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Amanda
03-23-2005, 12:33 AM
Red Anger


the jar I keep hidden in the back of my room,
everything I store inside it: hope, fear and gloom,
but the jar is filled mostly by one emotion I haven't said,
I feel it very often, and I know it as red,
they tell me it's a problem that needs to be resolved,
but they aren't me so why are they involved?
when I'm taunted and teased I feel it deep inside,
it's almost always mixed with sadness and a bit of broken pride,
red tends so make you be irrational and put up your guard,
I know the feeling well and controlling it is hard,
one thing about red is that it falls straight from your heart,
and the red will always puddle in the bottom of the jar

esaul17
03-23-2005, 01:26 AM
Pretty good. I liked the part where you talk about anger falling from your heart like blood.

sickcycle
03-23-2005, 02:12 PM
very well done indeed.

lpsk8er
03-23-2005, 08:59 PM
Well done.

JessaBomb
03-24-2005, 04:07 AM
Nice. I like it alot.

Il inno di morte
04-02-2005, 09:55 PM
Originally posted by sickcycle@Mar 23 2005, 09:30 AM
very well done indeed.
;) i agree. Great work, man! :D

D_A_V_I_D
04-02-2005, 10:06 PM
Originally posted by The sparkling diamond+Apr 2 2005, 11:13 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (The sparkling diamond @ Apr 2 2005, 11:13 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--sickcycle@Mar 23 2005, 09:30 AM
very well done indeed.
;) i agree. Great work, man&#33; :D [/b][/quote]
i double agree.

Awsome poem

arT saveS
04-02-2005, 10:08 PM
Not too bad at all.

LornVourkolakas
04-02-2005, 10:23 PM
Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.@Mar 23 2005, 01:51 AM
Red Anger


the jar I keep hidden in the back of my room,
everything I store inside it: hope, fear and gloom,
but the jar is filled mostly by one emotion I haven&#39;t said,
I feel it very often, and I know it as red,
they tell me it&#39;s a problem that needs to be resolved,
but they aren&#39;t me so why are they involved?
when I&#39;m taunted and teased I feel it deep inside,
it&#39;s almost always mixed with sadness and a bit of broken pride,
red tends so make you be irrational and put up your guard,
I know the feeling well and controlling it is hard,
one thing about red is that it falls straight from your heart,
and the red will always puddle in the bottom of the jar
I like it but I think you should read it over. There are some parts I think you should fix. (grammar-wise)

[Th3 Wkng De@d]
04-02-2005, 11:20 PM
Excellent. Keep up the good work.

the_musicman
05-29-2006, 02:54 AM
very good. 4/5