Finished

[Matt]

Hitch hiking down the cold 101
I'd hate to see boring 'cause they say this is fun
Ditched me out here in the middle of night
All because of some stupid fight
Well make me say sorry, 'cause I won't by myself
My face is freezing, but it's hot as hell
Am I drunk or going crazy or just paranoid?
Like trying to get on a plane when the ticket's void

Welcome to delirium
I'm finished fighting with my mind
Cancel my appointment
'Cause I give up, I'm mentally blind

Hands are blue, eyes are red, the world is downside-up
I'd like to entertain you more, but I've had enough
Which way is it to paradise?
Lights like a knife going through my eyes
Electric to acoustic to nothing at all
Whatever I do I just hope I fall
Into a pit of pitch black without any sound
'Cause the second half of karma's coming around

Welcome to delirium
I'm finished fighting with my mind
Cancel my appointment
'Cause I give up, I'm mentally blind

Stepped out of the line
Running out of time
Like a child gone mad
Only I don't know, I might be glad

Welcome to delirium
I'm finished fighting with my mind
Cancel my appointment
'Cause I give up, I'm mentally blind
You'd be crazy saying this is fun
I'm finished walking down the 101



I put that whole thing together in about ten minutes, so I could have done better. If you're reading this, PLEASE REVIEW IT. Please...

[.in.the.shadows.]

Very nice.

I like your writing style and the structure is nice. I think if you spend a bit more time with it and tweak it a bit more you could make it a bit better. Other than that I think it's great.

[Matt]

Well, at least I got one...

[lpsk8er]

Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.@Feb 28 2005, 11:35 AM
Very nice.

I like your writing style and the structure is nice. I think if you spend a bit more time with it and tweak it a bit more you could make it a bit better. Other than that I think it's great.
That's right.

[Hybrid Meteora]

I think it's pretty good. :thumbsup: