the devil thats inside

[D_A_V_I_D]

Im new and would really apreciate some feedback

The devil thats inside

The battle that wages inside my head,
Is fought but never won.
For the evil forces never run out
Yet good has only one

I feel my emotions escape from me
And enter all those around.
What I thought was good for me
Has bought me to the ground.

The pain inside is eating at me
Trying to get free,
The devil inside everyone,
The dark side living me

I try to run away,
I try to run and hide,
But how can you escape,
Something that’s inside.

How can you stop the darkness?
When it lies within
But you can not accept it
You can not ever give in

I feel my self give way to madness
I scream but no one hears.
Because I don’t own my body,
The devil lives in here

All I want is to be free,
From the mad world I come from
I feel myself step off the edge
And slowly I do plunge.

I may have stopped the devil,
Living inside of me,
But someone else out there
Has let their devil free.

[lpsk8er]

Well done.

[D_A_V_I_D]

thanx.
this is one of my first and id apreciate if people could tell me what to work on.
tanx again

[Il inno di morte]

Hey, this is a great poem! i loved the part:
I try to run away,
I try to run and hide,
But how can you escape,
Something that's inside.
Its really deep man, dont give up! keep on writing! :D

[D_A_V_I_D]

how did u find this one. it's old as. i posted it ages ago. and then left for a while

[Il inno di morte]

Honestly, I searched your stuff, cuz so far I liked all of it. Please dont get me wrong, I mean, I like your poems!!!! :lol:

[D_A_V_I_D]

well uve read all my stuff now, execpt one really old poem that i never posted.

[Il inno di morte]

lol I'll read it if you give me the opportunity :D . If u want me to, please post it or sent it to me. I'll be glad to give you my opinion if u want to hear it :lol:

[.in.the.shadows.]

Necroposting = bad.

Come on guys. Please Read The Rules.

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.@Apr 2 2005, 08:24 PM
DON'T NECROPOST!

Come on guys. You Know Better Than That!

Read The Rules.
whats that? :unsure: lol

[.in.the.shadows.]

Originally posted by The sparkling diamond+Apr 2 2005, 09:26 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (The sparkling diamond @ Apr 2 2005, 09:26 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--.in.the.shadows.@Apr 2 2005, 08:24 PM
DON'T NECROPOST!

Come on guys. You Know Better Than That!

Read The Rules.
whats that? :unsure: lol [/b][/quote]
Necroposting is when you post in a thread that's over 30 days old. It annoys a lot of people. Sorry if I sounded harsh. I appologize.

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.+Apr 2 2005, 08:28 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (.in.the.shadows. @ Apr 2 2005, 08:28 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:26 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--.in.the.shadows.@Apr 2 2005, 08:24 PM
DON'T NECROPOST!

Come on guys. You Know Better Than That!

Read The Rules.
whats that? :unsure: lol
Necroposting is when you post in a thread that's over 30 days old. It annoys a lot of people. Sorry if I sounded harsh. I appologize. [/b][/quote]
dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me :lol:

[.in.the.shadows.]

Originally posted by The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:29 PM
dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me :lol:
:lol:

You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven?

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.+Apr 2 2005, 08:31 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (.in.the.shadows. @ Apr 2 2005, 08:31 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:29 PM
dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me* :lol:
:lol:

You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven? [/b][/quote]
buddy, you damn are!!! :lol:

[.in.the.shadows.]

Originally posted by The sparkling diamond+Apr 2 2005, 09:38 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (The sparkling diamond @ Apr 2 2005, 09:38 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -.in.the.shadows.@Apr 2 2005, 08:31 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:29 PM
dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me* :lol:
:lol:

You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven?
buddy, you damn are!!! :lol: [/b][/quote]
Thank you, and I'm sorry.

:hugz:

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by .in.the.shadows.+Apr 2 2005, 08:39 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (.in.the.shadows. @ Apr 2 2005, 08:39 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Originally posted by -The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:38 PM
Originally posted by -.in.the.shadows.@Apr 2 2005, 08:31 PM
<!--QuoteBegin--The sparkling diamond@Apr 2 2005, 09:29 PM
dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me* :lol:
:lol:

You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven?
buddy, you damn are!!! :lol:
Thank you, and I'm sorry.

:hugz: [/b][/quote]
Please dont worry :D

[[Th3 Wkng De@d]]

Very good. Keep up the good work.

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by [Th3 Wkng De@d]@Apr 2 2005, 08:54 PM
Very good. Keep up the good work.
now, u're talkin' :D

[ahamLP]

The more poems I read of yours the more I'm convinced that you are among the tops here,you have such a great talent to say what you want to and more importantly write those in the way what others like too,so in a nut shell you are just amazing,never ever stop your mind's bleed,ur mind's vommit let it come out and you will see what miracles it will do for you.

[D_A_V_I_D]

Originally posted by ahamLP@Apr 3 2005, 06:18 AM
The more poems I read of yours the more I'm convinced that you are among the tops here,you have such a great talent to say what you want to and more importantly write those in the way what others like too,so in a nut shell you are just amazing,never ever stop your mind's bleed,ur mind's vommit let it come out and you will see what miracles it will do for you.
among the top. WOW
thats a great compliment
i came here to share a few things that i rote,
i never thought i'd here that

[Il inno di morte]

Originally posted by D_A_V_I_D+Apr 3 2005, 01:57 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (D_A_V_I_D @ Apr 3 2005, 01:57 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--ahamLP@Apr 3 2005, 06:18 AM
The more poems I read of yours the more I'm convinced that you are among the tops here,you have such a great talent to say what you want to and more importantly write those in the way what others like too,so in a nut shell you are just amazing,never ever stop your mind's bleed,ur mind's vommit let it come out and you will see what miracles it will do for you.
among the top. WOW
thats a great compliment
i came here to share a few things that i rote,
i never thought i'd here that [/b][/quote]
belive it or not, that's true man, you are AWESOME!!! :D Don't you give up!!! you've got some real talent! :P