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Arhaz
02-09-2005, 06:09 AM
I lived for you.

Cough out this wave of dust/
I am in mistrust,
This place where you pushed me into/
And I fell in/ for you.
This rap song never intended/
To make you cry/all these years/
The most beautiful thing/faded in her tears/
I fear/to lose you every time/to my best friend/
To the time when this world ends/
You hurt me when you look to the ground/ instead of caring why I stayed around/
Only so that none might steal/the real love you had once for me/and I believe/
It’s no relief/ to help you live…

Can I push you down my cliff of care?
Down to where you can be mine
This is the only place, I know where,
Your surrender is my love’s sign.

I hate it when he asks for a instant/I don’t give it/I’m hesitant/
I can’t afford to miss your touch/
I turn around and stop his clutch/
And then this feeling come over me/only next to find/a wounded him to see/
And you stare at me with a hardened heart/claiming I had no part/
To ever protect you from the start/and you runaway/leaving me in dismay/
And I walk my way/to the very day/when there’s no goodbye/and every feeling for you just dies…


Can I push you down my cliff of care?
Down to where you can be mine
This is the only place, I know where,
Your surrender is my love’s sign



this is the very first time i have written a poem that i can't relate to...somehing to do with being over obsessed with your girl...just wrote it within 7 minutes...hope it makes sense...i need your comments...

lplava
02-09-2005, 06:18 AM
It's good to see that you've tried a new style!!!
And even though it's based on love, the writing's still brilliant...It still has your usual flair...
Let's face it...you're a poetic genius.
You can write on anything.

Arhaz
02-09-2005, 05:14 PM
thanks...Vaanya (akka)
^_^

lpsk8er
02-10-2005, 12:23 AM
Sounds good.

RiffRockerX
02-10-2005, 02:46 AM
Wow. I didnt think a poem that lengthy could prove to be as good as this one. Very well!

Jon[athan]
02-10-2005, 03:13 AM
not bad. i found it kinda hard to follow along, but then again im not one for poems. but it still makes sense. good job

maverik68
02-10-2005, 05:06 AM
nice ^_^

man i need more practice

Arhaz
02-10-2005, 05:01 PM
thanks yo'll... some real encouragement i get from here...thank you!!! ^_^