My Song

[CHAPSTICk]

This is a verse in a song im in the process of writing, its really short because its nowhere near being finished, I just want you tell me what you think so i can see if im going in the right direction

My Song
It seems as though I’m always living in the past; then I stop and realize the present is moving too fast-

I can’t hold on as my life is spinning out of control.
I’m not the person I once was; I think I’ve lost my soul-

I was so full of life, so full of happiness,
but then the darkness crept in and now I’m so depressed

in life, and time, and even in this rhyme
I can feel-
The dark thoughts that plague my mind….

What do you think? :unsure:

[Omar]

That's just a verse :rolleyes:
but not a bad job, skip a few "I" 's

[CHAPSTICk]

thanks

[XxLPxX]

Cool. :D